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mindy Junior Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 34VA, US |
I Want... I just wanna remember what it feels like to be in love... I want to know that warm feeling I got when we hugged... I want to feel that happy feeling when you speak... I want you to just make my knees go weak... I want my heart to tremble at the sound of your name... I want to go back where there was no pain... I want to gaze in your eyes and have that perfect kiss... I want to say "There's no better love than this"... I want to know that feeling of trust and stability... I want to have every moment in tranquility... I want every promise to be kept... I want to back before there was regret... I want to always be known as your baby... I dont ever want to hear the word "maybe"... I want honesty to be the key... I want you to be in love with me... I want you to know that I will never change... I dont want you to feel as if you're caged... I want happiness for you and me... I want to go back to how we used to be... By, mindy |
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rOxXbabY391 Member
since 2002-12-14
Posts 71 |
That was SOOOO good!  Cleva idea for a pOem! i really liked these lines: I want to gaze in your eyes and have that perfect kiss... I want to say "There's no better love than this"... GGGGGGreaT jOb! ~*~eMiLy~*~ "I don't think I can make it through one more night. 'Cause how do you answer "What's wrong?" ~ when nothing is right." |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! Well mindy, this is one beuatiful poem you've got here! It is sad, yet not really depressing to read. Rather, it was quite delightful to read. Now, this just may be in my mind, but I think the color choice was appropriate for the poem; it was used in context, something even I fail to do correctly! There was only one mistake I found in the entire thing: "I want to [go] back before there was regret..." In the poem above that line is missing a go. While this may be intentional, it looks to me like a mistake I make often enough, you thought the word, just didn't type it. If I'm wrong, then I'll just look stupid, but thats okay! lol. Other than that, this was a very nice poem! *~Rich~* "You can't hurt meee!! 'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!" |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
wow! I really like this poem! I think everyone knows the feeling of wanting that specail relationship. It is so well written! Its sad but not depressingly so and it just makes you ache inside because you know what that wanting is like! Great poem! Live and laugh and make sure to always have Bella Amor (beautiful love) |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
Welcome to Passion! Nice meeting you  Eliza Simmons |
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