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Heavens Tears

Senior Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

0 posted 2002-12-21 11:59 AM

Hey everyone, its been a while hasnt it? Almost a year actually. I don't know what inspired me to post here again. I really miss PIP and the people here. Anywho, here's a poem (duh) and I hope you enjoy it!

Insatiable

Beauty was all around you
and yet you were walking in circles with your eyes closed
all the while blaming fate and destiny for your unhappiness
not realizing the blame lay at your own feet.

Happiness was following you
but you were too scared to look back over your shoulder
scared you'd have to face your past
when really all that was behind you was your own shadow.

Your felt your world crumbling beneath you
and you were so deperately holding on to all you had
that you didnt see the only things crumbling
were the things you needed to let go.

Now they're catching on
to your false laughter and fake smiles
and you still cant find a reason to make them real
but you never thought to look anywhere but the mirror.

OtherSideOfTheMirror
Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 245

1 posted 2002-12-21 12:48 PM

"and you still cant find a reason to make them real
but you never thought to look anywhere but the mirror."

Great line. This poem was easy to understand and thoroughly enjoyed... All I have to say really is... NICE!

keep it goin
-othersideofthemirror

CloudedDreams
Member

since 2002-11-23

Posts 210
My Fantasy Realm

2 posted 2002-12-21 01:05 PM

"scared you'd have to face your past
when really all that was behind you was your own shadow."

I think this especially describes how people think they know that they are the target of all bad things, when in reality, they are just scared of themselves

This is an eye-opener. Great write!

Yes there will be tommorrow, but will you be there to greet it?

FireInYourEyes
New Member

since 2002-12-20

Posts 9

3 posted 2002-12-21 01:34 PM

wow this really hit close to home. the idea of this poem was great and i loved the way you portrayed the theme without having to use a rhyme scheme or really any of those types of poetic techniques. this was a very simple but moving poem and i look forward to reading more in the future.

roxywrestlegirl04
Member

since 2002-10-29

Posts 74
good ole DINWIDDIE

4 posted 2002-12-22 06:13 PM

HEY GURL....itz me...LIZ..haha...i have a name on here now!! i thought this poem was GREAT...keep it up!! (reply to some of my work PLEASE!!)....

live,love,and die...but take RISKS..thatz what makes life worth the living, love worth the heartache,and death the new beginning!

jennilynn
Junior Member

since 2002-11-11

Posts 29
here with me

5 posted 2002-12-22 07:17 PM

wow, this is really good. some poems that don't use any particular kind of structure sound really phony, but this one was just plain good. thanks for the read.

~jenni~

"who stepped on your brain?"-my friend Katie

*remember that everything happens for a reason. you just have to figure out what that reaso

BlueEyes
Member

since 2002-08-30

Posts 152
TX, USA

6 posted 2002-12-27 10:51 AM

All I can say is WOW! I believe that people tend to favor poems that they can relate to.. And this is something that speaks right to my heart and tells me to open my eyes to whats going on around me... You really hit home with this one.. Great Job!!!

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

7 posted 2002-12-28 12:41 PM

Heavens Tears~
This is an excellent write...very well done.
I truly enjoyed reading it.
It's nice to see you posting again and I hope
you'll stick around and post lots more.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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