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PoeticGoddessOfDepression
Member

since 2002-07-02

Posts 439
I am everywhere

0 posted 2002-12-19 09:42 PM

Seasons change.
And in fall everything wilts.
In winter,
All is buried in a tick layer of ice,
Somehow
The dead is preserved.
And when spring comes,
All is born again.
I can only ask the same for you..
And me.
But weeks have passed.
And the people seem to change.
I’m starting to look depressed.
I didn’t want to get into this mess.
I never should have tired
-you-
Never should have lied.

This can’t be.
This can’t be me,
Alone.
That can’t be you,
With her.
It seems like I have been disowned.
Will she be a new me?

Feelings change.
And it feels like everything’s gone.
In days,
All is coming back and,
Somehow
The dead is alive.
And when the memories come
They flood my mind.
I can only pray to no one,
For luck.
But weeks have passed
And the feelings won’t seem to change.
I’m starting to feel depressed.
I need some time to decompress.
I never should have tired
-you-
never should have lied.

This can’t be.
This can’t be me,
Alone.
That can’t be you,
With her.
It seems I have been disowned.
You promised no one would take my place.
Is she a new me?

C’mon.
Go ahead and tell me how happy you are with her.
Go ahead and tell me how glad you are they you broke up with me.
Go ahead and keep us a secret.
…
You tore me apart,
But I admit
I let you.

This can’t be.
This can’t be me,
Alone.
That can’t be you,
With her.
I have been disowned.

“I make an impact on lives thru truth as well as lies. I overcome ur eyes +leave and etched memory forever.
its my gift, my intentions are only well"

foreverwithyou
Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

1 posted 2002-12-19 09:57 PM

back to ur old sn now r we????? yea itz better this way i think wellz this was good i must admit that i am jelous of ur poetry lol but i wont come and kill u or anything yea well maybe ill talk to u on aol bals ska dot
###CATHY###

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

2 posted 2002-12-19 10:49 PM

I really liked this sara! Your poetry always has a very deep meaning and thats what makes me like to read it. I really enjoyed this and hope to see many more to come!
*Allison*

"O My love
Please don`t cry
I`ll wash my bloody hands
And well start a new life"
-Good Charlotte

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

3 posted 2002-12-19 11:33 PM

That was a very good poem, wonderfully expressed!

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change? -Dishwalla-

Rainbowdust
Member

since 2002-12-05

Posts 320
Sydney, Australia

4 posted 2002-12-20 04:54 AM

You tore me apart,
But I admit
I let you.

I enjoyed this original commentary on something usually so cliche and melodramatic. The repetition worked very well; thanks for sharing.

The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears.

dinky
Member

since 2002-10-19

Posts 258

5 posted 2002-12-20 06:49 PM

hey,
this was awesome!!!
so ur callin him 'ey??
but this was reaally good,
i luved it!
~samantha~

"sometimes i just feel like
quittin i still might
why do i put up this fight?
why do i still write?"

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