Teen Poetry #6 |
Till the End of Time....Yea Right! |
roxywrestlegirl04 Member
since 2002-10-29
Posts 74good ole DINWIDDIE |
From the beginning of life till the end of time No matter what exes I had before You are the one that will always be mine You are the one that I adore You are my morning, you are my night You are everything inbetween You make my heart take off in flight You make me feel like a queen Yea right! A guy like this could never be Make my heart take off in flight Where is this guy, please let me see! All my life I've been trampled on Now I'm afraid to love In a relationship I'm like a newborn fawn Trying to chase after a dove But I've learned to be confident Life will be great I just have to be self-sufficient And learn to rely on fate. live,love,and die...but take RISKS..thatz what makes life worth the living, love worth the heartache,and death the new beginning! [This message has been edited by roxywrestlegirl04 (12-18-2002 10:24 AM).] |
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Stinky Twinkie Member
since 2002-11-26
Posts 204Dinwiddie |
This was great, I didn't even read it....but it was good. You spelled "what" wrong in the second line. Thank god for the edit post function. -Stinky Twinkie- |
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rxyfxy04 Member
since 2002-11-26
Posts 54lil' town in Virginia |
hey girl!.. this was good.. but i already told you that!! keep it up.. love ya RxyFxy04 |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
roxywrestlegirl04~ This is a nicely written piece. You are definitely growing in your poetry, and I'm enjoying your work. Keep writing. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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roxywrestlegirl04 Member
since 2002-10-29
Posts 74good ole DINWIDDIE |
thanx everybody for the replies....i really am trying to grow in my work!! it is hard but i guess im doin aight! THANKS!!!!! |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Your not just doin alright your doin great! I enjoyed this poem, Im sure alot of others could relate to it as well. WinterWren |
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LTEvans Member
since 2002-12-06
Posts 72Lenham, England |
I like the last verse it has an almost pleading quality to it. Intresting poem. Solipsism saves us from the atavism of the Equalitarian. |
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rOxXbabY391 Member
since 2002-12-14
Posts 71 |
All my life I've been trampled on Now I'm afraid to love In a relationship I'm like a newborn fawn Trying to chase after a dove veryyy go0od! ~*~eMiLy~*~ "I don't think I can make it through one more night. 'Cause how do you answer "What's wrong?" ~ when nothing is right." |
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