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rxyfxy04
Member

since 2002-11-26

Posts 54
lil' town in Virginia

0 posted 2002-11-27 10:56 PM

The sky was a clear, deep blue,
as we sat and talked that night.
The moon shone bright and grew.
I realized something wasn't right.

You had caught my eye at the first glance,
then we talked of our fears and dreams.
Maybe it was God's plan, or just by chance.
Looking back we both spoke free and clear it seems.

Our eyes met as you left in a cloud of dust.
My heart was pounding as it seemed to get darker above.
Others may say it was a simple taste of lust,
but on that night, I realized I was in Love.

[This message has been edited by rxyfxy04 (11-28-2002 06:39 PM).]

roxywrestlegirl04
Member

since 2002-10-29

Posts 74
good ole DINWIDDIE

1 posted 2002-11-27 11:22 PM

i thought this was one was good...but not really your best...but i do like...very much!! hehe....i feel like i can totally relate to it in some weird way...i dont know...im whack i KNOW...hehe
LOVE YA
liz

Stinky Twinkie
Member

since 2002-11-26

Posts 204
Dinwiddie

2 posted 2002-11-27 11:45 PM

sorry Nicole, I dont get it. you'll have to explain this to me....or not.

stephanie
Junior Member

since 2002-11-15

Posts 33

3 posted 2002-11-28 08:47 AM

cole...i liked it...it does seem kind of spaced out and speratic but i understand what you are trying to say. i liked it alot. love ya crys

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

4 posted 2002-11-28 12:48 PM

This was ok......once again, i don't rhyme to often so what do i know....

Riley

Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you......

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

5 posted 2002-12-03 03:14 AM

rxyfxy04~
I really like this one...the content, the flow, etc.
I thought it was beautifully written and I enjoyed reading it.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

rOxXbabY391
Member

since 2002-12-14

Posts 71

6 posted 2002-12-20 05:03 PM

awwwwww

cute!! not my favorite but a still a GOO0OD poem!!

~*~eMiLy~*~

"I don't think I can make it through one more night. 'Cause how do you answer "What's wrong?" ~ when nothing is right."

[This message has been edited by rOxXbabY391 (12-20-2002 05:05 PM).]

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