Burn me away... Please read this id like input

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Open Poetry #22

Burn me away... Please read this id like input

~Allie~
Junior Member

since 2002-05-23

Posts 13
New York

0 posted 2002-08-28 03:32 PM

I cant breathe in without shaking
As the candle flickers out
the only thing that makes me feel un-lonely is fading
I'll let it burn out
Let me burn out
Light a match for a cigarette and your picture
Im burned, now its your turn
I think the smoke is attracted to my eyes
because they swell up in tears
The fire that consumes the last memory of you, goes to my hand
I watch as my fingers slowly burn off
-Pain on my hand dulls the one in my heart, so I whisper to the flames..
"Burn me away"

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

1 posted 2002-08-28 04:53 PM

Emotional charge...brilliantly written...never to be the reality of the situation. Take care young one. ThisDiamond

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

2 posted 2002-08-28 05:19 PM

Very heavy. I could feel your pain--literally and otherwise! I believe that it is incredibly important for each of us to own our own power and not allow others to take it away. Each relationship provides us with the opportunity to grow. When it's over, bless it for what it taught you and move on with your life. Take care!

Love, Light & Laughter
Linda

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

3 posted 2002-08-28 05:27 PM

Allie, I think that this was a Stellar piece. Great emotion, thoughtfully crafted.

~wranx

In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward".

~wranx~

Krishankins

Senior Member

since 2002-06-23

Posts 972
Texas

4 posted 2002-09-02 11:47 PM

I like this one. It needs a bump.

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

5 posted 2002-09-02 11:48 PM

Strong stuff

Cold hands means a warm heart

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

6 posted 2002-09-03 12:31 PM

I think it burns bright, Allie...
good job

~ chipmunk hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

7 posted 2002-09-03 02:29 AM

My fingertips felt the pain, and so did my heart. Want a cool healing mantra to soothe both heart and hand?

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

8 posted 2002-09-04 04:08 AM

They don't all work out...and so poems from the hurt heart...James

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