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WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

0 posted 2002-08-23 12:39 PM

Still my thoughts are shadowed
by some long forgotten deed
that seems to want
to stick around in my brain
in a neverending
finger pointing, blaming
carnival of my sins atmosphere
that more than tears at my soul
it steals the small amount of sanity
I have managed to covet.

I tire of this invasion
upon my life, my very existence.
Oh that I could find
that small corner once again
where life was not painful,
where this clown of guilt
didn't have free reign
to destroy in his comic treachery
my happiness, and peace.

This I would keep close to me
never again letting it slip
through my fingers
but hoarding it like water
in a land barren with drought
keeping it pure and simple
in it's liquid warmth
that the barrier will always
be there against the onslaught.

WhiteRose

Touch me with your whispers,
and I'll listen with my heart.

[This message has been edited by WhiteRose (08-23-2002 10:09 PM).]

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

1 posted 2002-08-23 12:56 PM

wonderful!
and working on several layers
do not let the past
chew on the present
like a worrytoy
and the rainrainrain
where are you?
very good
brian

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

2 posted 2002-08-23 01:18 PM

Especially like the Clown allusion
Really pounds out the complexity of the grief.
And grief is so hard to let go
Always the pondering of is it my fault

Very nice

Gloom

Gabriel Frost
Member

since 2002-08-15

Posts 216
Between midnight thoughts

3 posted 2002-08-23 01:31 PM

You people can't be human.How many times will you amaze me white rose?

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

4 posted 2002-08-23 02:34 PM

very intensely wonderful rose!! This is very deep and very well written.

If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

5 posted 2002-08-23 04:34 PM

(smiles) Yes, divide a line between the carnival and your happy place and always stay on the happy side of the barrier and let all your tears drift away! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Anne, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Toerag
Member Ascendant

since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

6 posted 2002-08-23 04:46 PM

I liked this one Rosie!!!!!!

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

7 posted 2002-08-23 05:09 PM

Me, too. *S* This is excellent work, gal! *S*

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

8 posted 2002-08-23 05:49 PM

Outstanding, Anne
You have also taken a large stride forward in your writing.

Better'n'better

~wranx

In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward".

~wranx~

CocoBaci
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

9 posted 2002-09-24 10:56 PM

WR, once again my compliments2u on a fantastic write...
Smiles2uPoetFriend...
*~coco~*

Krishankins

Senior Member

since 2002-06-23

Posts 972
Texas

10 posted 2002-09-24 11:01 PM

You leave me smiling with this one, White Rose!!

Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!?

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