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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2002-08-19 07:33 AM


A Rainbows End

I sat at the end of a rainbow
Looking for each treasures treasure
Rubbing lamps and wishing pleasure
Until the wind began to blow

When I stopped to looked around
I saw the trees in shadows dance
The leaves were twisting in a prance
Yet I could not hear a sound.

It’s when the leaves began to fall
They whirled and spun into the sky
And fluttered like a butterfly
And as they did I heard a call

A velvet voice that steered a broom
Graced my ears and cleared the haze
And there my mind left rainbows gaze
As sunlight chased the weave of loom

I would have liked a clearings tend
For now I’ve lost the meanings end.



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1 posted 2002-08-19 08:54 AM


Beautiful morning read Sy!
Was that perhaps my voice you heard steering that broom?
I raise my cup of tea to you this morning.
~Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2002-08-19 09:04 AM


Enchantress
Not to worry.   

Chanson
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3 posted 2002-08-19 09:05 AM


You may be in a quandary about the meaning but the colorful picture produced from your words isn't lost on me. Simply lovely, Sey.

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2002-08-19 09:11 AM


Chanson
Thank you

NewEnglandlazurlu
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5 posted 2002-08-19 09:33 AM


Sy ~~ this was so beautiful. Not to worry if you got lost ~~ I loved all the words, especially these:

'... I sat at the end of a rainbow
Looking for each treasures treasure
Rubbing lamps and wishing pleasure
Until the wind began to blow ...'

Sometimes we need to just ramble along and let the wind take us wherever...

Hugs, Marti

Janet Marie
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6 posted 2002-08-19 09:35 AM


It's when the leaves began to fall
They whirled and spun into the sky
And fluttered like a butterfly
And as they did I heard a call

A velvet voice that steered a broom
Graced my ears and cleared the haze
And there my mind left rainbows gaze
As sunlight chased the weave of loom

I would have liked a clearings tend
For now I've lost the meanings end.
============================

Look at Stinky playing with his ryhmes
love the rhyme scheme of this one Sy-babes....and the imagery of this bittersweet beauty as well....
trust me..ya havent lost a thing ...me thinks ya can write the end and its meaning and everything in between.
Your poetry is the pot of gold at the end of the rainbow

*ww*
  


Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2002-08-19 09:43 AM


Marti,
Thank you for the read and sweet comments.


JM,
When you reply
I can only sigh.
WWRS

Sunshine
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8 posted 2002-08-19 10:05 AM



I wondered where my broom went...

Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2002-08-19 10:08 AM


Sunshine,
Good morning.

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10 posted 2002-08-19 11:30 AM


enjoyed
Marge Tindal
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11 posted 2002-08-19 12:04 PM


Seymour~
Would ya' look at the rhyme scheme in this one ???????
Fantabulous !
Don't worry about losing the ending ....
I think it just may be in the 'pot of gold'~
Ya' think ?  I do !

You precious leprechaun poet, you !!
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
           noles1@totcon.com                       

Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 2002-08-19 01:24 PM


Vandana,
Thank you for the read and comment.

Marge,
No doubt about it, you are a delight.

Mistletoe Angel
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13 posted 2002-08-19 01:38 PM




(smiles) Oh Seymour, this is powerful, I love it, you always write such deep provocative thoughts out so well! (big hugggssssss) Now run and catch that pot at the end of the rainbow, this is wonderful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Bill Charles
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14 posted 2002-08-19 02:13 PM


Seymour - at the end of the rainbow the treasure is there. Nice write, enjoyed it...

BC

Seymour Tabin
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15 posted 2002-08-19 02:55 PM


Noah,
Enjoyed your comment, thank you.

Bill,
Glad you enjoyed, thank you.

Magnus
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16 posted 2002-08-19 04:27 PM


What?  Sy?  What are you doing with Sun's
broom?  

Ya went and dun it again, didn't ya?  

Yet another of your classic poems,  with the
rhyme and meter to add to the touch...

Seymour Tabin
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17 posted 2002-08-19 05:23 PM


Magnus,
Thank you barry and I see you have been busy.

CocoBaci
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18 posted 2002-09-24 10:45 PM


Seymour, this is a beauty of a read...
The imagery is precious...
SmilesNhugs2uPoetFriend
*~Coco~*

Gemini
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19 posted 2002-09-24 10:54 PM


Thanks for your colorful imagination and painting such a lovely rainbow, full of the mystery and intrigue that rainbows are.
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