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Open Poetry #22

Blue Springs (senryu)

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

0 posted 2002-10-09 10:47 PM

(This is my first time doing one of these. I thought I would try to do it.)

Water is cold
Bubbles up from a hole
To relax in in summer

Cold hands means a warm heart

[This message has been edited by the_loner_23 (10-09-2002 11:30 PM).]

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2002-10-09 11:21 PM

(smiles) In the summertime, there is a special place just south of Boulder I love to go to to relax and dip my feet in the cool creek from St. Mary's Glacier in Eldorado Springs! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, I love it, you need to write more senryus, this is a fabulous first, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Julie, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Tammy Blessing
Member

since 2002-08-26

Posts 366
PA

2 posted 2002-10-09 11:23 PM

Hey there loner. Why didn't you post this in the workshop? I'm not really good at these myself yet, but I think that maybe the second line has only 6 syllables??! I could be counting wrong though as it's late and I'm droopy eyed. Anyway, I still think it's cool(or should I say cold?)...and true. Be "seeing" you around the boards!!
Tammy

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