Jazna Leaning There (repost)

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Open Poetry #22

Jazna Leaning There (repost)

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

0 posted 2002-10-06 06:15 AM

Jazna Leaning There

The rain on the cabin windows
drifts like rinse waves in a car wash.
My fingers searching minor sevenths,
my ardent gaze the portside rail,
to see Jazna leaning there.

The summer's marbled skies spread wide
our trolling laughter buffed with spray,
her listing form against the rail.
I tune to open G where all
blues and heartaches follow when.

From sacred space her spirit falls,
a surreal vision cosmos sent.
Devolved from humid heavy mist
her blue-eyed radiance beams
in quandom pose leaning there.

With sudden suck of breath to heart,
my ebbing guitar descants play
to searing pains of her demise.
I cry out with odes and tears
to see Jazna leaning there.
© Eric True

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

1 posted 2002-10-06 10:27 AM

This is splendid. An excellent write and it made for an elegant read.

"The first rule of poetry, write what you know."

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2002-10-06 01:53 PM

ETHome~
This is still my favorite of all I've read of yours~
There's just a great big slice of your heart in this one~

The feelings that come through are so touching~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

3 posted 2002-10-06 04:13 PM

From sacred space her spirit falls,
a surreal vision cosmos sent.
Devolved from humid heavy mist
her blue-eyed radiance beams
in quandom pose leaning there.

beautifully written, this is a tender and warm read. Enjoyed.

El riesgo vive siempre!

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

4 posted 2002-10-07 02:32 PM

ethome...I enjoyed reading this very much. I could tell your heart was in it. Thanks for sharing.

With Love and Best Wishes,
Ethel...garysgirl

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

5 posted 2002-10-07 02:37 PM

I love it

Cold hands means a warm heart

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