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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2002-10-06 02:05 AM


You are a photograph of flame.
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1 posted 2002-10-06 02:24 AM


Very cool, Mike.  Your love for her, I understand.
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2 posted 2002-10-06 02:32 AM


Short and sweet - packed with emotion.
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3 posted 2002-10-06 03:15 AM


Thank you, both. Just dredging up old ghosts. 'Cause I can!
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4 posted 2002-10-06 07:38 AM


THis one sparks off so many images, and alot of memories.  It is amazing how sometimes one line can say it all.


El riesgo vive siempre!

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5 posted 2002-10-06 09:39 AM


Awesome Mikey!! Perfect. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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6 posted 2002-10-06 09:47 AM



Please, please, puhleeze do NOT make this a challenge...because this is perfect!


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7 posted 2002-10-06 09:52 AM


...and you are a song of wind.

EA

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8 posted 2002-10-06 11:08 AM


Wow! Really remarkable! Now I gotta figure out how to get my bottom jaw off my chest!
  

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9 posted 2002-10-06 11:19 AM




This is my muse, not able to keep up with yours!! Wonderful simplicity, Mike!!

Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!?

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10 posted 2002-10-06 02:22 PM


Thank you, everyone.

And Kris, see, that's the problem:
your muse needs to be
a beautiful woman,
or the ocean,
not THAT weird thing.

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11 posted 2002-10-06 03:15 PM


You words are painting pictures in my mind.....................Hum-m-m-m-!!
Best wishes to all
Ethel/garysgirl

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12 posted 2002-10-07 11:52 AM


Things that make you go H-u-m-m-m-m?

(ugh, sorry)

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13 posted 2002-10-07 05:35 PM


one perfect sentence...

*smiles*
~Tier

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bsquirrel
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14 posted 2002-10-07 06:46 PM


Thanks, Tier. That's all I could manage.
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15 posted 2002-10-07 07:06 PM


well... my memory of "her" would be different...

You are frostbite unhealed


Now...if things had been different...

a sparks shadow illuminated


(chuckling)..... just dropped in to read abit..and couldn't resist one liners...


Nicely stated my friend...



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16 posted 2002-10-07 07:19 PM


Thanks, Ron. Heh heh. It's hard to get meter to work when it's only one line.

YOU are a PHO-TO-graph of FLAME.

Four hard,
three soft.

I originally had  You are a photograph of a flame,
but the "a" sounds like a skip in that case.

What did my teacher say long ago? Never let the readers see you sweat? LOL

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17 posted 2002-10-08 02:57 PM


My delay reaction (I've been sick, hon, sorry):

Oh so yummy and beautiful. How d'ya pack so much into one line?

Oh, and hon... New pic? Y' can never again deny you look 'xactly like Tyler.



I'm so going to have issues someday, aren't I?

your tongue's like poison
so swollen it fills up my mouth

rs

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18 posted 2002-10-08 03:14 PM


Glad yr feelin' better, babygrrl! I was gettin' worried...

Okay, okay, I concede I look A LITTLE like Tyler. But the eyes and our whole carriage are soooooo different!!!

I don't think he could sit through a movie like Fitzcarraldo, for one, where the only explosions are from dynamite, and with no fiery blooms resulting. Nah, I like Tyler.

BUT I DON'T LOOK LIKE HIM!!!

Do ah?

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19 posted 2002-10-08 03:18 PM


WOW!

I never thought one line would impress me as this one did!

~Sheri

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Swim out to it"

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20 posted 2002-10-08 04:25 PM


Thank you, Sheri.
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21 posted 2002-10-09 06:18 PM


You have a wonderful way with words, Mr.Squirrel
You can spell beauty with a single line
~ wordy rodent hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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22 posted 2002-10-09 09:14 PM


Mike, one line that packs so much....
yep, very cool

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23 posted 2002-10-10 12:42 PM


Lyra,
It's great to see you again! I was gettin' worried.

Susan, much thanks.

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