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Winter Rain in F
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Winter Rain in F |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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Shhh. Ti ti ti. Now flow. (keep heart's warmth) Flow. (warm blood's calm) Flow. Ripple, slow wind. Whisper, long rain. Build the tempest slow, step by step, purple notes. Trill among the clouds; arpeggio now tumble down. Soft gray stones in growing eyes, stripping hands of thunder. Oh, stretch the rumble down, bring it through the dark bass clouds. Swell on through the rain (top hand) and clap them both to lightning's end. Petal break; sharpen chords; Hands in rove; Stuttered stoke. Stretch the rumble out to smoke. Ringing dissonance. Now bring a broken melody. Break the clouds in poetry. Slow the strength. fingers' seat. Slow the strength. Soften length. Trees across the plain. Etch their ache within sustain. Grasses blowing, softly there. Lift descent. Flow her there. (Re... re... re...) Now flow. (calm blood's heat) Flow. (heat sure breath) Flow. (breath's own pace) Shhh. |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
I have always heard Winter Rain in d-flat. Just goes to show you that music is never heard the same way. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Petal break; sharpen chords; Hands in rove; Stuttered stoke. Stretch the rumble out to smoke. Ringing dissonance. Now bring a broken melody. Break the clouds in poetry. Slow the strength. fingers' seat. Slow the strength. Soften length. Trees across the plain. Etch their ache within sustain. Grasses blowing, softly there. Lift descent. Flow her there. ================================ shhhhh .... listen ... Im whispering into the wind... "Your rhymes soothe me mothy soul" "thank you for that my soulful squirrel"   |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Hmm, I thought it was in D-flat, but then realized I had a 45 RPM set at 33 1/3.  Thanks, M.R. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I'm glad you enjoyed this, Butterfly Slippers! I just wanted to mess around with stresses and meter, and, frankly, wish I had a piano at the office. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Ripple, slow wind. Whisper, long rain. Build the tempest slow, step by step, purple notes." oh I do love this Mike ( I am supposed to have rain on Friday) this goes to my library |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
yeah....youplayed this tune well and I can almost hear it tinkling out as notes are dropped...repeated...lost to the next.. enjoyed this a great deal my friend.. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This one MUST be read aloud! and Mike? Congrats on 6,000 posts! |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
SEA, Thank you. Send the rain this way! Ron, Ah, perhaps my poem helped inspire your Showered in Silent Words? If not, I will pretend it did anyway, and feel honored that my words could inspire yours, or, at the very least, fire your mind a bit. Sun, oh, I definitely intend to read this aloud. And thanks for the well wishes and congratulations! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mike Feels like rain tonight...the sound of your poem is in the room..rhythm touched am I. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Mikey...it's raining here tonight and this is just beautiful.... Also congratulations. ~Hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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Anvrill Senior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 710in the interzone now |
*melt* ..... I don't know what it is about poems starting with "shh," but...... *melt s'more* beautiful, baby. beautiful baby. your tongue's like poison |
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Samantha G Kennedy Member
since 2002-07-27
Posts 131Kent England |
Ripple, slow wind. Whisper, long rain. I'm hushed love the flow to this ~ it reads beautifully Sammie |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
what wonderful performance poetry this would be and how very fresh and original - I enjoyed it very very much! |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Martie, thank you. I worked on this one a bit to get the rhythm (and the melody) into the words as best I could... Nancy, thank you for your kind words and your congratulations. I love you, babygrrl. Glad y' enjoyed. *kiss* Thanks, Sammie. The hush before the storm? I'm glad you enjoyed this, Bekki. It would make even better performance poetry if I had a piano with it. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
a concert for one-- You have captured the peace of a musician's heart--that place of unthinking concentration--um..Zen.... om mani padme ohm... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Zen, you understand musicians well. Hmm, I sometimes wondered why I always called you Sen instead of Ser. (at least I don't do Se'n anymore) |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) This is beautiful, sweet friend, I love to walk out in the freezing rain (as long as it is not hailing of course) as it is so comforting and I feel great tranquility doing so! (big hugggsssss) This is wonderfully composed, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
damn I miss reading you. |
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