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Professor Gloom
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of Depression

0 posted 2002-08-27 07:06 AM


Depression was her fastest friend of all,
When no one else was there it came to call,
Rushing to greet her with so many thoughts,
Pain, agony and self doubt always brought.

Not too deep, just enough to bring on sleep.

Obsession of lack of being perfect,
Too slight and being insignificant,
She binds herself tight in preparation
Bliss, fantasy and a brief elation.

Not too much, just waking sleep is enough.

Distortion of everything about her,
The comfort of living a constant blur,
Perfection drifts off with reality,
Notching her arm causing her not to be.

Gloom


© Copyright 2002 Aszard Drazlom - All Rights Reserved
WhiteRose
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1 posted 2002-08-27 08:23 AM


Depression was her fastest friend of all,
When no one else was there it came to call,
Rushing to greet her with so many thoughts,
Pain, agony and self doubt always brought.


I had much more highlighted, like the whole poem actually. But I thought these lines the ones that spoke to me the loudest. You described depression well. A malady I suffered greatly in my youth. Nicely done Gloomy!

Touch me with your whispers,
and I'll listen with my heart.

Professor Gloom
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2 posted 2002-08-27 08:29 AM


Thank you, WhiteRose,
Also a part of my youth, in my old age I have progressed to Gloom,
Pleased you enjoyed

Gloom

Zinsser
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Calif.
3 posted 2002-08-27 10:19 AM


Hey... who told you that you could write about me  LOL   : )

Connie

Professor Gloom
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4 posted 2002-08-27 10:47 AM


Thank you, Zinsser,
I was just gazing into my seeing pool of black,
Looking in to see what was looking back,
I didn’t remember if it was a spell I cast
When I was looking into your past.

Gloom

Zinsser
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Calif.
5 posted 2002-08-27 10:53 AM


That is almost creepy in a hauntingly beautiful kind of way  LOL
ok how sick does that sound  LOL

passing shadows
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6 posted 2002-08-30 11:29 AM


I can see me here
VAS
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7 posted 2002-09-01 09:31 PM


I could see me so clearly right up to the part about being able to sleep to stop it.

At least being with others can allay it for awhile.

btw, did you see the one I wrote to you? I'm wondering if you didn't see it or if I offended you in some way, I hope not, but there go those doubts again.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Paul Wilson
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8 posted 2002-09-02 03:29 AM


Gloom...Very serious thoughts here.
Sleep seems to bring comfort till again we wake...Paul

Zall
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9 posted 2002-09-02 08:00 AM


hmmm,

i like this one,

Zall

miscellanea
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10 posted 2005-05-12 08:46 AM


I believe I know aerson much like this!  I love your sensitivity, Professor.  You are a very unique individual who I'm glad to meet through his writing.

     miscellanea

[This message has been edited by miscellanea (05-12-2005 12:13 PM).]

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