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Seraphim New Member
since 2002-10-02
Posts 1Heaven =) |
 Pic by a great artist... poem by me  On this point I want to say hello to you all =) Sera |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
welcome! interesting combination of image and word... though for some reason I find the image conveys less of the feeling I think you want to convey than the words. My strength is not rhyme nor the proper and best pactice use of it, so I can't really comment on that. I can say the progresion is good from beginning to end with only minor hicuups in places I think the rhyme caused you to change flow in an effort to actually complete the couplet... again Welcome! and look forward to seeing more of your words.. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions, Seraphim. The pic is hard to see, and if it is copyrighted, we may have a problem leaving it here, as there are copyright laws by which we abide. However, if the picture is free to use through the internet, and/or you have permission to use same, that's great! Please, check your E-mail for a Special Greeting! Karilea |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
 WELCOME TO PASSIONS!! Very nicely done first post! I look forward to seeing more of your work.. And believe me you won't be lonely here! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Sera, this sounds so sad, sweet friend, you have come to the right place as here we share all our tears with each other and compassionately touch in poetry! This is a powerful debut, sweet friend, I LOVE IT!!! Welcome to Passions, sweet Sera, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sera, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (10-02-2002 02:31 PM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Welcome! You won't be lonely anymore! You are now a member of the PIP family! Kindred spirits! You write of loneliness with such depth, I could really feel what you were experiencing (or was this just poetic licence and not about you at all?). Anyway, I love your name, Seraphim, but that is of a much higher realm of angels than the one I'm from! hehe Take care! Earth Angel |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Seraphim Welcome and a wonderful first post. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Welcome! I really like the pic, and the poem I think, compliments it nicely |
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