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Sudden Tears |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
unexpected tears for no reason sobs rending the surface of her mind unconscious longing and fear and hope and love sudden tears wetness echoing drops on cheeks silent signals of distress quickly hidden with a smile that never reaches her eyes [This message has been edited by Poet deVine (10-02-2002 12:39 AM).] |
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Auguste 
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
"that never reaches her eyes" ...I think that line struck me the most, Sharon. I love the feel, the honesty in this piece. I think we've all been here at one time or another in our lives. You've expressed this well. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
nicely expressed...most often my tears are sudden, when I least expect them... sometimes in happiness, more often not. M |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
yer my girl... If I felt such things so powerfully, from so far away? I would hide too. (OH. I DO, don't i?) lu |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
wow! That last line is killer - great stuff Sharon - have missed reading here  |
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Radrook Senior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 648 |
I agree, this poem is a work of art. I love the economy of words. That last line is especially dynamite! Thanks for sharing! [This message has been edited by Radrook (10-02-2002 01:32 AM).] |
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secretlife Member
since 2002-07-30
Posts 359Grean Earth ,,, |
Waaaaw.. I really love your poems.. SO nice.. secretlife, (Easy come,,Easy go) |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
ok - now at first glance, it looked simple, like there wouldn't be too much substance to this poem. (which is quite unlike you). Well, i was quickly disabused of my hasty assumption as i read through this SEEMINGLY simple post of yours and could feel the emotion of it slamming home. Now this may seem silly, but the following three lines caught me the most - quote:six simple words, simply placed. in context, however, they epitomize this poem in both feeling, partial repetition, and word. i could almost picture someone sobbing... "and - and - and" Very well done Sharon. Multi-Kudos to you!  |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Very human and no doubt refreshing. I've not cried (physically) in quite some time. Enjoyed. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
like this one...both the form and choice of words fit the emotional out pouring crying can represent. Always a pleasure to read your creations... |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
There is much that can be hidden by the eyes that cannot be hidden by the heart. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is very powerful... so very sad... and so well understood. *S* Excellent work! |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Emotions can be so powerful without warning...well written here. Take heart my friend...lots of arms around you. ThisDiamond |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Sharon - this really hit home for me. Excellent writing. Going into my library. Man, oh, man this is good. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
This is great! So much said in so few words. "You" rended the surface of "my mind" where so often tears are the truth and a smile, -a denial- Thank you for explaining more about me, -to me- Thank you for capturing this moment in time, which too often gets buried in the 'busy-ness' of the day. Your words keep popping back into my mind, without re-reading it.Amazing without surrender, be on good terms with all persons... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all so much for your kind words. You've really made my day. This poem started with just two words - sudden tears - and I wanted to convey why tears could happen with the feeling behind them. I'm so grateful that you enjoyed this. Thank you again.  |
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caterina Member
since 2002-07-25
Posts 188Canada |
I really connected with this poem, that was me yesterday, the ending is perfect. I think I will print this one out and stick it in my "Mood Poems" folder. Thankyou, I really enjoyed. caterina |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) I know this feeling all too well, sweet friend, sometimes I too hide tears because I feel many wouldn't understand them or could relate to them! (sigh) My heart goes out to those who face this anguish, sweet friend, God Bless You, this is a wonderful write, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sharon, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Poet, I see you're growing, too. Sheesh, all my favorites just keep gettin' better! I can reach out and *touch* the tears in these words. Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
A smile is all-encompassing, isn't it? When we smile from the eyes, we smile from within... You've got a winner here, PdV.. |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Sharon this is so touching. I will cry at the drop of a hat and could certainly relate to this. Beautiful dear poetess. Hugs, Marti Every now and then take a good look at something not made |
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