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WhileIWasGone
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0 posted 2002-10-01 10:34 PM



In solitude
I'm wandering
the wind brings
the chill of evening

The autumn sun sets
in golden fire
to lie down and sleep
is my desire

Melancholy
gets hold of me
weariness
is all I feel

Daylight fades
and shadows fall
I hear the voice
of memory call

The sound of night birds
in the sky
beneath the rising
moon I lie

A cold breeze
gently touches me
I'm drawn deep
into memory

The moon is full
and I can't sleep
in darkness here
I lie and weep

Hours pass
without sound
my questions silenced
no answers found

O night my mother
to thee I pray
wilst thou not take
my sorrows away

Or wilst thou let me
sleepless lie
in hopelessness
until I die



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1 posted 2002-10-01 10:43 PM


"Daylight fades
and shadows fall
I hear the voice
of memory call


The sound of night birds
in the sky
beneath the rising
moon I lie

A cold breeze
gently touches me
I'm drawn deep
into memory

The moon is full
and I can't sleep
in darkness here
I lie and weep"


I especially liked these lines, but the entire poem is full of sadness, but in a good way....



Martie
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2 posted 2002-10-01 10:49 PM


Sometimes, the way the sun sets, or the chill of air...anything,  triggers a memory that weeps like you do here, and I hear you because you write with a sensitive touch, emotive and real.  Well done!
Bill Charles
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3 posted 2002-10-01 10:52 PM


WhileIWasGone - this is a most touching write, and I can feel it as I read the words that came straight from deep inside you. A most thought provoking write, and written very well...

BC

wranx
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4 posted 2002-10-01 10:59 PM


Beautiful, in that longing doubtful way you have.

I love this, as well.


~Ed

FuzzyFrazzledFraggle
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5 posted 2002-10-01 11:01 PM


hauntingly beautiful..*sigh* you my dear WIWG have a way with words..behold your muse...

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bsquirrel
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6 posted 2002-10-18 03:05 PM


There's hope in these words,
you just have to crack 'em open.

passing shadows
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7 posted 2002-12-30 03:07 PM


sad...hopefully not till you die, no...
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