Open Poetry #22 |
In solitude |
WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
In solitude I'm wandering the wind brings the chill of evening The autumn sun sets in golden fire to lie down and sleep is my desire Melancholy gets hold of me weariness is all I feel Daylight fades and shadows fall I hear the voice of memory call The sound of night birds in the sky beneath the rising moon I lie A cold breeze gently touches me I'm drawn deep into memory The moon is full and I can't sleep in darkness here I lie and weep Hours pass without sound my questions silenced no answers found O night my mother to thee I pray wilst thou not take my sorrows away Or wilst thou let me sleepless lie in hopelessness until I die |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Daylight fades and shadows fall I hear the voice of memory call The sound of night birds in the sky beneath the rising moon I lie A cold breeze gently touches me I'm drawn deep into memory The moon is full and I can't sleep in darkness here I lie and weep" I especially liked these lines, but the entire poem is full of sadness, but in a good way.... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sometimes, the way the sun sets, or the chill of air...anything, triggers a memory that weeps like you do here, and I hear you because you write with a sensitive touch, emotive and real. Well done! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
WhileIWasGone - this is a most touching write, and I can feel it as I read the words that came straight from deep inside you. A most thought provoking write, and written very well... BC |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Beautiful, in that longing doubtful way you have. I love this, as well. ~Ed |
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FuzzyFrazzledFraggle Member
since 2002-09-20
Posts 155Fraggle Rock |
hauntingly beautiful..*sigh* you my dear WIWG have a way with words..behold your muse... Consider yourself fuzzed |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
There's hope in these words, you just have to crack 'em open. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sad...hopefully not till you die, no... |
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