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Tiersdin
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0 posted 2002-10-01 01:46 PM



The attraction was ineluctable
panting so close to the surface
begging to be expressed

I took you out,
a date feigning innocence
complete with chaperone
but there you were,
charging the air around
me with your presence,
eyes speaking what
your lips did not

The movie played like
background noise
compared to my libido
so complete was my attention
to you

Clumsily, I reach
desperately, you grasped
pulling my fingers to your lips
sipping the tips in the dark
awakening every nerve
I thought dead

six years, my love
& I'm still feeling the
after shocks...


~Tier
9/02


"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

[This message has been edited by Tiersdin (10-01-2002 01:50 PM).]

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Radrook
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1 posted 2002-10-01 02:34 PM



Beautiful poem!
I had an experience like that.
It does stay with you.
Thanks for sharing!

[This message has been edited by Radrook (10-01-2002 02:36 PM).]

bsquirrel
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2 posted 2002-10-01 02:51 PM


Wow, that's excellent writing, and a good mindset, too. I like the sipping the tips line the best.
Sunshine
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3 posted 2002-10-01 02:57 PM



Wow.

Whew.

I'll be back.

Cpat Hair
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4 posted 2002-10-01 03:17 PM


I'm agreeing with Mikey on this one...
Christopher
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5 posted 2002-10-01 04:13 PM


ahha! good 'punch line' there... leads up to the last like the prologue to a story.

hugs you

Mistletoe Angel
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6 posted 2002-10-01 04:39 PM




(smiles) Yay! I love this, sweet friend, this is beautiful, this too could make a great beginning to a novel, I LOVE IT, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Tiersdin, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Tiersdin
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7 posted 2002-10-01 05:10 PM


Radrook, it's true, such things do stay with you! Thank you for reading! *smiles*

Mikey, Positivity is always a good thing, you know? Thank you for the kind comment!

Sunshine, Flattery will only get you bigger and better *HUGS*  Thank you!

Ron, YOU? At a loss for words? Nah...
*teasing*  Thank you for reading!

Christopher, the poet with golden voice! I'm glad that you liked the poem, *hugs back to you!

And Noah, the personification of "sweetheart", thank you for your kind words.

thank you, everyone...
~Tier

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

Moonlight Romeo
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8 posted 2002-10-02 12:58 PM


The title only hints at what is here.

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks?  It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

wranx
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9 posted 2002-10-02 05:50 PM


Tier,
beautiful,

and six years of aftershocks!
Whew!

~Ed

Tiersdin
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10 posted 2002-10-02 06:25 PM


No, thank YOU, Moonlight Romeo!

Wranx, I suppose love does that to a person, eh? *chuckles*  Thank you! *hugs*

~Tier

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

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