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Lonely Shadow
Member

since 2000-03-14

Posts 128
Virginia

0 posted 2002-09-29 08:23 PM

I know this is kind of weird, but when I wrote it... I was sitting in a librbary... I couldn't think or even begin to focus on a single thought... so here's what came out... hope you like it...

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deafening silence
surrounded by endless knowledge
but cannot hold these truths close
only infinite space, nothing more
a pale canvas in my mind's eye
untouched by the brilliant colors within
radiant beauty of thoughts and memories of old
wondrous shapes and lines, laws and truths alike
but alas, only endless utter nothingness
what keeps the artis at bay?
why can't the artist show more
than the silent color of nothingness?
only a short while, I miss the colors already

Fear destroys the mind, depression destroys the soul... only love and compassion may save you from death.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2002-09-29 08:26 PM

very cool write, and I like the intro....sets the tone for the poem

Miss T. Eyed
Junior Member

since 2002-05-26

Posts 47

2 posted 2002-09-30 10:54 AM

Very interesting, even though you stated that you couldn't focus on a single thought in the intro of this poem, I do feel you captured a message that may have been looking for release through you. What I see through this poem is a person needing to be more than they are, a person needing to grasp a perspective, or a journey that seems out of reach, but may actually be closer than they think because of their desire to reach for it. I may be way out there in my thoughts regarding this poem also, but I thought I would try and take a stab at it. Thanks for giving my mind a work out. LOL

cjohnson/poet2079
Junior Member

since 2002-07-31

Posts 35
va(757)

3 posted 2002-09-30 12:20 PM

Lonely Shadow,
"Silence is golden" and so is your poem.
Words echoing from the heart and soul; yes I like it. Colorful words create a scene, I don't think you missed the colors at all(smile)!!!

eyssence

ThUnDeRkYsS
Senior Member

since 1999-09-23

Posts 727
Wisconsin

4 posted 2002-09-30 01:48 PM

I like this a lot, pick up on the feeling great and know this feeling too, kewl write my friend.

Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer.

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