Open Poetry #22 |
Mental Nothingness |
Lonely Shadow Member
since 2000-03-14
Posts 128Virginia |
I know this is kind of weird, but when I wrote it... I was sitting in a librbary... I couldn't think or even begin to focus on a single thought... so here's what came out... hope you like it... ----------------------------------- deafening silence surrounded by endless knowledge but cannot hold these truths close only infinite space, nothing more a pale canvas in my mind's eye untouched by the brilliant colors within radiant beauty of thoughts and memories of old wondrous shapes and lines, laws and truths alike but alas, only endless utter nothingness what keeps the artis at bay? why can't the artist show more than the silent color of nothingness? only a short while, I miss the colors already Fear destroys the mind, depression destroys the soul... only love and compassion may save you from death. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
very cool write, and I like the intro....sets the tone for the poem |
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Miss T. Eyed Junior Member
since 2002-05-26
Posts 47 |
Very interesting, even though you stated that you couldn't focus on a single thought in the intro of this poem, I do feel you captured a message that may have been looking for release through you. What I see through this poem is a person needing to be more than they are, a person needing to grasp a perspective, or a journey that seems out of reach, but may actually be closer than they think because of their desire to reach for it. I may be way out there in my thoughts regarding this poem also, but I thought I would try and take a stab at it. Thanks for giving my mind a work out. LOL |
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cjohnson/poet2079 Junior Member
since 2002-07-31
Posts 35va(757) |
Lonely Shadow, "Silence is golden" and so is your poem. Words echoing from the heart and soul; yes I like it. Colorful words create a scene, I don't think you missed the colors at all(smile)!!! eyssence |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
I like this a lot, pick up on the feeling great and know this feeling too, kewl write my friend. Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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