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bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2002-09-27 02:03 PM

So wipe the thick fingers of storm
from your eyes.

Recipes for directionless maps.
You are nowhere.
You are now here.
A circle of levees surrounding, no damming;
the pumps themselves are submerged.

Drop a stone in; maybe this time
the turbines will turn, the water will drain.
Bowls of broth heap up on the table.
They feed only ears, so poor and brave.

Who would buy such a brick
as a book,
an empty bowl?
A book won't build houses;
won't keep the swamp out.
So save your spoon

for the walk back home.

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (09-27-2002 05:04 PM).]

Miah
Senior Member

since 2002-08-26

Posts 1062
Pennsylvania

1 posted 2002-09-27 02:15 PM

Great poem. Reminded me of that fabel called "Stone Soup" thanks for the read.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

2 posted 2002-09-27 02:22 PM

Thanks, Miah.

Angst and Isidore.

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (09-27-2002 03:09 PM).]

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

3 posted 2002-09-28 06:53 AM

Who would buy such a brick
as a book,
an empty bowl?
A book won't build houses;
won't keep the swamp out.
So save your spoon

for the walk back home.

I used to love that story "stone soup"
it is great the way you turned its message on its head. I had to laugh at the ending, nice twist, and wonderful write.

Too early for the rainbow, too early for the dove These are the final days, this is the darkness, this is the flood
L cohen

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

4 posted 2002-09-28 09:52 AM

I like it, but I'm not sure I understand the spoon and the walk home. Maybe my mental is kinda blind this morning? I do like the "...recipe for a directionless map.." line the best though.

later from a whatheheckamIdoingupthisearly? Jenn

"two hearts will build the foundation for one point of light
a duet done with passion"

excerpt from "I Love You"

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

5 posted 2002-09-28 10:02 AM

So might this one be more literal than it appears? Might you live on the Gulf of Mexico and be writing about Isadore? Ah yes, your reply to the first response. I just may be on to something.

This was a fascinating read that rekindled memories of past literary experiences...Stone Soup and an uplifting message of the good news: "Keep your fork."

So is the advice about keeping one's spoon so that should one need to dig him/herself out, a tool would be handy or is it because someone might offer sustenance on the way. hehehe I'm so literal sometimes.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

6 posted 2002-09-28 12:32 PM

Thank you, one and all, for reading this poem which I have attempted to bury the message in fourteen layers deep. lol

VAS! You came closest.

Temptress, thanks for waking up early.

Brian ... It's what VAS said. To dig yourself out.

Oh, and VAS, I live in Encino, California,
but the feeling's right.

Thanks again!

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

7 posted 2002-09-28 04:21 PM

chuckling...

sorry it took me so long to get here...my spoon kept bending...hitting rock, and then I had this ridiculous map, and I stopped to rest, but got absorbed in this book only to find a ludicrous ending...and, and, and...

Can I hug ya for this'n...

I am grinning like the madwoman that I YAM..that I YAM...

ROFLMAO

You are a writer's best friend!

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

8 posted 2002-09-28 07:32 PM

(big hugggssssss) Oh Michael, I could never begin to imagine how many spoons it could take to accumulate the damage a storm like that could do, a soup of stone cannot do much as a soup boiling can amend! (sigh) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

9 posted 2002-09-28 08:34 PM

Mikey - great write once again, but now I keep thinking of The Matrix, and "there is NO spoon." lol. Enjoyed. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

10 posted 2002-09-28 08:45 PM

Mike, still writing such cool thoughts.... I like this.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

11 posted 2002-09-30 02:18 PM

Thank you everyone.
Glad the soup is still good
a
few days' cold.

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