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Absent Queen Tomasa
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Absent Queen Tomasa |
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Radrook Senior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 648 |
To My Queen Tomasa I cherished you just for myself my Tomasa, But now for a mere mortal man You leave me alone with my throne my Tomasa This I cannot understand! You cut to the throat of my kingdom Tomasa. My kingship is worthless as now I rule all alone within desolate places Afflicted by scepter and crown. Assailed by the dreams of your beauty Tomasa, I am wracked by derisions of sleep. Entombed in your gardens of pleasures I plundered While a wolf is devouring my sheep. I am bludgeoned by peasants who choose swift rebellion-- Cruel knights wielding rapiers of glee. Harassed by the castles that batterings crumble Permitting my servants to flee. Enraged by my treasures so suddenly stolen By my armies refusing to fight. I am Vexed and perplexed by those pleasures once savored Night after night after night! Yet Enthralled by the all of the hopes deep within me, I envision myself as your king; With you on your throne by my side my Tomasa Arousing me once more to sing. [This message has been edited by Radrook (09-25-2002 05:35 AM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
an interesting form and tale... not at all sure I understand all the personal connections to this one that seem to lie under the surface of the words...but did enjoy the read..and the talent. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What an interesting write. I placed Tomasa in Google and found everything one would ever want to find...in foreign languages... several foreign languages! LOL...could you give us some insight on the name, whether this is fiction or based on fact...you've drawn an interesting character, and I for one would like to know a little more! |
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Radrook Senior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 648 |
Hi! Thank you both for your feedback. Tomasa, or Thomasa, is the feminine form of Thomas in English or Tomas in Spanish. The character though fictitious, represents essentially how I feel toward a "recently" terminated relationship that lasted 18 years. Since I just learned that reconciliation is no longer possible--I was deeply saddened. Actually, it was only later after several reads and rewrites that I realized that I was indeed not talking about the fictional Tomasa but about my real feelings about my lost relationship which once did bring me much comfort but which is now painfully gone. Thank you for your interest. [This message has been edited by Radrook (09-26-2002 01:50 AM).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Yet Enthralled by the all of the hopes deep within me, I envision myself as your king; With you on your throne by my side my Tomasa Arousing me once more to sing. Radrook, wonderful flow to this tragic tale. Enjoyed the read. Too early for the rainbow, too early for the dove These are the final days, this is the darkness, this is the flood |
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