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1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2002-09-23 02:23 PM

This I Am

I am brush of lips
in velvet glide
liquid in
tenderness tide
wind blown steps
on a sandy ledge
which can be
touch of edge
warmth in
spark of fire
kindling silently
of a timeless desire
a chance
purposely not taken
a heart that knows
not mistaken
this I am
and so much more
the stir of sea
that washes over
the shore
but there is flaw
there is a fault
in the sweetness
there is salt

I’m not disappointed, I never expected anything from you.

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

1 posted 2002-09-23 03:28 PM

Oooooh Helen!! This is a keeper!! Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Miah
Senior Member

since 2002-08-26

Posts 1062
Pennsylvania

2 posted 2002-09-23 03:39 PM

This was very good. Thanks for sharing.

han_tigger
Member

since 2002-08-10

Posts 50
Thundersley, Essex, Uk

3 posted 2002-09-23 03:44 PM

I like the rhyme and flow of this poem, the short lines work well and you glide from one image to another. very good.
My poetry website is: http://www.geocities.com/han_tigger/HannahInglis.html
Hannah.

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

4 posted 2002-09-23 04:38 PM

This was awesome. I enjoyed

Cold hands means a warm heart

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

5 posted 2002-09-23 05:39 PM

Seems quite enough and more than most. I like the quiet confidence in this.

~Ed

In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward".

~wranx~

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

6 posted 2002-09-23 09:01 PM

(smiles) Yes, there is salt in the sweetness always but the sweetness will always out-taste the bitterness! (kiss on cheek) These are wonderful "bitter-sweet" words, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Helen, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

7 posted 2002-09-23 09:16 PM

enjoyed

DonFurr
Member

since 2001-01-01

Posts 172
Monticello IN

8 posted 2002-09-24 05:53 AM

Is it a fault
if within the wet
The taste of salt
is of lovers sweat

Enjoyed this one much Sweet Lady

"If there is any doubt about it there is no doubt about it." Linnie Stanton

Krishankins

Senior Member

since 2002-06-23

Posts 972
Texas

9 posted 2002-09-24 11:04 AM

Nice twist at the end, Helen. Salt isn't always bad, though.

Hugs 2 U!

Kris

Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!?

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