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slightly off the map |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I sail upon uncharted seas by guide of dated map. I plot my course accordingly, believing world is flat. I should have rode the she-dragon-- tsunami within flirt of ledge. I should have rode her all the way. But I dropped anchor on the edge. I see shadows dancing feet, between the line of is and was. A dance of grotesque puppetry-- dangling from a rope of pause. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
I burnt that map long ago, Where I was going I didn’t want to know, What ever edge of any abyss I didn’t care if I fell in or did miss, I just want to sail the unknown sea Exploring whatever is around me Drifting where the current will flow. Gloom |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent Karen! I loved the images this brought to mind. I could see you halt and screech at the edge of the cliff ... left dangling there in mid-pause. Very much enjoyed!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, Have to agree with Kit om this one. Excellent write and read.  |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Awesome write and read Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Oh Karen, I too envisioned you dangling off the chasm and defying gravity propelling in mid air looking between what will be and what is now! (kiss on cheek) This is excellent, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Slightly off the map and forever on the edge... this, m'dear, is a  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiling at you all---that sort of describes me well, Kari...yep... "slightly off the map and forever on the edge..." sigh. and  wink...sometimes I gotta giggle at ME... Thanks all, I've been in writer's warp lately...not sure where I wanna go next, yanno? so I thought I'd just hang out and READ today. Hugs, all! |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Anchor off the cliff -- long time before it hits bottom; might not take you with it. Loved it. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I see shadows dancing feet, between the line of is and was. A dance of grotesque puppetry-- dangling from a rope of pause. There is much I'd like to say about this one, but for the moment I am speechless and that is a rare feat you have achieved. Too early for the rainbow, too early for the dove These are the final days, this is the darkness, this is the flood |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
grotesque puppetry? my tired brain says this don't sound very happy tell me I'm wrong? |
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas |
Nice one!! Flirts with dare! Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!? |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Learning the lessons the hard way sure make for some good poetry from the she dragon herself! Seriously though, you do make good use of your pen Serenity woman!!! |
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Justin D. Skize New Member
since 2002-09-23
Posts 4 |
serenity blaze- This is very cool. Excellent imagery here. I enjoyed this very much. [This message has been edited by Justin D. Skize (09-24-2002 02:30 AM).] |
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