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Doug Pretorius
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since 2001-04-08
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Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2002-09-23 07:38 PM


If Only I Were Special
September 23, 2002
Copyright 2002 Doug Pretorius

she wakes up in my dreams
and falls down my tears in streams
I can't separate what appears from what seems
am I supposed to know what that means?
she walks along the clouds
my head bobs up and down
in nightmares and visions aloud
I can't be heard above the crowd
she holds out her hand
to point out her special man
if only I were he
maybe then special I would be

© Copyright 2002 Doug Pretorius - All Rights Reserved
Miah
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since 2002-08-26
Posts 1062
Pennsylvania
1 posted 2002-09-23 08:09 PM


very lovely, but you are special.



the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA
2 posted 2002-09-23 11:36 PM


Awesome write

Cold hands means a warm heart

Krishankins
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since 2002-06-23
Posts 972
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3 posted 2002-09-24 01:22 AM


Anyone that can write like this is indeed a very special person! nicely done!

Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!?

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
4 posted 2002-09-24 01:51 AM


she wakes up in my dreams
and falls down my tears in streams
I can't separate what appears from what seems

I liked those lines a lot~
but it hurts even more when you know the truth and it has nothing to do with what it seems.  I've been caught in a catch 22...what can you do except grin and bare it and all that jazz!!!  Nice poem~

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