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Crysania
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Lost in a dream. (Please don't wake!)

0 posted 2002-09-21 04:24 PM


I Cried

I held you in my arms,
That cold, lonely night,
I breathed in your scent,
And cried

I dug my hands,
Into your fur,
And stared into,
Your beautiful eyes.
Thinking of you now,
I can’t help but smile,
But then all I could do,
Was cry

Your love was like a river,
Never stopping, ever flowing,
Like the tears on my cheeks,
As I cried

The tears came,
Faster then before,
As I thought of tomorrow,
Without you by my side.
As your tail thumped,
Against the floor,
While I cried

You were comforting me,
When I should have been ,
Comforting you.
You were sick,
And still,
You tried,
And I cried

I held you close that night,
And I always will.
When your heartbeat stopped,
And your eyes closed,
My heart broke in two,
I didn’t want to go on,
And I cried


© Copyright 2002 Stephanie Coulson - All Rights Reserved
the_loner_23
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1 posted 2002-09-21 04:25 PM


This is a good write

Cold hands means a warm heart

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2 posted 2002-09-21 04:34 PM


Stephanie,
Now I have the following in my head:

"I died
Eating french fries.
On the corner of the restaurant
where you broke my heart.

"I cried,
'cause I bit my tongue.
I hope truth washes over you
like a rash."

I Died, Bif Naked

Mistletoe Angel
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3 posted 2002-09-21 04:35 PM




(tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Stephanie, now you got me flooding in tears too after this powerful debut, my heart goes out to you and your loss and know here we are all here for you if you ned somneone to talk to because we are all blessed to have you as a friend and part of our poetic family, God Bless You! Welcome to Passions, sweet Stephanie, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all send sympathies and heart out to you, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Stephanie, thank you for sharing!



Mya love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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4 posted 2002-09-21 04:45 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!
Very heart-wrenching first post.
I know you will love it here...so...relax, read, sign others posts..
but most of all...enjoy yourself, and have fun!
I look forward to seeing more of your work.
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2002-09-21 04:46 PM


Crysania
Nothing like a good cry, enjoyed the write and read.

Kielo
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6 posted 2002-09-21 04:53 PM


Mara? White Tiger? Anyway, welcome to Passions! This was beautiful! You use imagery wonderfully. I absolutely loved it.

Kielo

I LOVE YOU! *kisses you* hehehe...

[This message has been edited by Kielo (09-21-2002 04:54 PM).]

Kielo
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7 posted 2002-09-21 05:25 PM


Sorry, just coming back to add to library...

Kielo

FuzzyFrazzledFraggle
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8 posted 2002-09-21 05:57 PM


Welcome To Passions..heartfelt write..look forward to more..

Consider yourself fuzzed

Miah
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9 posted 2002-09-21 05:59 PM


  I hate loseing a pet.  Good poem though.
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10 posted 2002-09-21 07:43 PM


Welcome to Passion!! I cried and cried rivers of tears when we had to put our beloved pet down. Good write. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Gentle Spirit
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11 posted 2002-09-21 07:46 PM


We just lost our little pet not long ago, and it is very hard to do.  You wrote this well.  Welcome to Passions and enjoy your stay.  Looking forward to more from you.

If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

Sunshine
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12 posted 2002-09-22 08:33 AM


Stephanie, my dog used to hold me just like this when I was young and troubled.  I think one of my very first posts here at Passions was about my own dog.  Welcome to Passions, and please, check your E-mail for a Special Greeting.

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound


[This message has been edited by Sunshine (09-22-2002 08:35 AM).]

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13 posted 2002-09-22 09:11 AM


Crysania~
Welcome to Passions~
This is a poingantly felt write of the heart~
You will find much to enjoy and share in this circle of poets and friends~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Crysania
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Lost in a dream. (Please don't wake!)
14 posted 2002-09-22 01:22 PM


Thank you everyone soooo much.

Yep, you guesses it, Keilo. It's...........'mara!

Anyhow, I think I will like it here, a lot. Thank you once more.

I got the card, Sunshine, thanks. It made me feel special! *feels special*

One last time, thanks.

Kielo
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15 posted 2002-09-22 08:19 PM


*claps* Yay... I'm smart. It was the tiger that gave it away. *huggles* Love you!

Kielo

I LOVE YOU! *kisses you* hehehe...

[This message has been edited by Kielo (09-22-2002 08:30 PM).]

JamesMichael
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16 posted 2002-09-22 11:17 PM


Nice expression of your feelings...James
Fuji
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17 posted 2002-09-23 11:39 AM


That was nice.  I have lost some real close dogs and some I never said goodbye to.  If I had it would have been with your poem.
Earth Angel
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18 posted 2002-09-23 03:07 PM


Welcome! Welcome! Welcome! You have debuted at PIP, hitting a home run! Although this was a very sad subject---the death of your beloved pet---(and you almost had me in tears as well because you wrote so vividly!!)--I did, however, enjoy reading this poem. Keep 'em comin'! I look forward to reading more!

~ smiles across the miles ~
Earth Angel

han_tigger
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19 posted 2002-09-23 03:36 PM


You have really encapsulated those feelings, loosing a pet is loosing some1 you love, loosing a member of the family that can never be replaced.
This poem keeps the memory alive and conveys the thoughts, feelings and memories you have in a really heartfelt way.

han_tigger
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20 posted 2002-09-23 03:36 PM


You have really encapsulated those feelings, loosing a pet is loosing some1 you love, loosing a member of the family that can never be replaced.
This poem keeps the memory alive and conveys the thoughts, feelings and memories you have in a really heartfelt way.
My poetry website is: http://www.geocities.com/han_tigger/HannahInglis.html

Gabriel Frost
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Between midnight thoughts
21 posted 2002-09-25 02:33 PM


I can't believe i only just saw this...i felt that way before, my god you sound so much like i felt!It's almost unreal.Anyway, your poem, it was amazing!
Auguste
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22 posted 2002-09-25 03:46 PM


A pet truly is a part of the family.  Welcome to Passions and your poem brought both sadness and a smile.
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