Insubordinate eyes (Sen challenge)

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bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

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0 posted 2002-09-16 12:10 PM

Your eyes drizzle over success,
finding tears in coalesce.
"The system must be wrong," you think,
"For I do not receive attention."
Looking for the seams to pull
apart with fingers gone to claws.
Eviscerate your brand of hate
and jealousy. Talk to me.

Your eyes keep tearing up, a mess,
watching words in shimmer pools
in which you cannot wade or guess.
"The world is so unfair and shallow.
No one marvels at the care
I take to place these words in line."
You're doing fine. You're doing fine,
insubordinate eyes.

Do not call up a new task,
but rather cultivate your rows
in weeds and thoughts of sour need
that grow among your garden's greed.
Do not break your spectacles
across the paving stones of street.
Walk the long and wandered mile,
your eyes in bright deceit.

Call for God to hear your plea.
Close those eyes and intimate
a conversation with divine,
pretend your luxury finds sate.
Pretend your words are worth the time
to see the years within their line.
There was a time when I knew why I
wore your insubordinate eyes.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

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Realms of Light

1 posted 2002-09-16 12:18 PM

You are such an incredibly deep thinker--your work provokes thought---and at least two reads!!!

~ smiles and a little hug ~
Linda

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

2 posted 2002-09-16 12:20 PM

Thanks, Linda, for readin' this thing.

Mikey

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (09-16-2002 01:07 PM).]

Tim
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since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

3 posted 2002-09-16 01:27 PM

short question, why did you edit out the info why the poem was posted? Just curious.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

4 posted 2002-09-16 01:36 PM

Tim,
I realized it was obvious enough
to those who care on this issue.

Mike

Tim
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since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

5 posted 2002-09-16 01:42 PM

Just didn't want to misinterpret your statements again. Got it.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

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Posts 7855

6 posted 2002-09-16 01:44 PM

Stop bumpin' me, Tim.

Mike

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

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Portland, Oregon

7 posted 2002-09-16 02:08 PM

(smiles) Yay! Oh Michael, this is a wonderful challenge response, eyes can always express so many windows to the soul and you share them all wonderfully here! (sigh) Kudos to you, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

8 posted 2002-09-16 02:40 PM

smiling....myomy...

What hath Zach wrought?

Actually, I do wish I had the time to read and greet everyone here...it's sad, I think, that there may be some who set a personal value on the numbers. Fortunately, I am just as interested in reading, and as yanno, I have prolly the MOST fun replying. I'm a wicked little imp, and mean no harm--as YOU know, but oh my have I been misunderstood...chuckle..oh well...

Thanks for taking this snippet of conversation and making such an eloquent statement, Mike.

(and now, Ed is cajoling me to do some picture thing now!

)

Bravo, Sir Squirrel.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

9 posted 2002-09-16 02:53 PM

Thank you, Noah.

Sen, I don't understand it either. It's almost as if, if we get a number above 7, we are calling upon friends far and wide to push our posts to the top.

Reality check: It's a poetry site. Who cares what influence you hold? Just have fun, meet people, READ THEIR POEMS!

Sheesh.

Much love to you, Sen, for the idea.

And I know the picture thing of which you speak of. I took Baba Yaga. This should be int'restin'.

Mike

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

10 posted 2002-09-17 10:57 AM

Mike...you always impress me... nicely owven thoughts and emotions using the phrase Ser provided in her challenge... good stuff man!

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

11 posted 2002-09-17 12:19 PM

Thanks, Ron. I loved your zen highway one. Post it here!

Mikey

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

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By the Seaside

12 posted 2002-09-18 11:38 PM

Impressive work indeed..
I like that look and what you see,
but most of all it's the introspection
that you lend!

I do believe you're getting better all the time "Mikey"

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

13 posted 2002-09-19 11:49 AM

Why does everyone insist on puttin' Mikey in quotations?

I'm glad you enjoyed this, Lori. It was (strangely) really, really fun to write.

Mike

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