Open Poetry #22 |
Window Raindrops |
Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
“WINDOW RAINDROPS” by Bill Charles ~~~~ Waking in the early morn, listening to pitter patters… Sweetness of a gentle rain, friendly skies it announces… Holding you is similar, knowing your innocence… Your breath deep with caring, I love you in confluence… You’re like the gentle rain, you flow with loves wanting… Sweet your fragrance, fresh, your lips on me are abducting… Window raindrops what I see, pathways into your being… I follow them as they flow, passions into this morning… ~~~~ [This message has been edited by Bill Charles (09-15-2002 10:31 AM).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Beautifully said Bill. You always share with openness and such self awareness that it is easy to follow the intent of the poem. Nicely formatted free-verse from you. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Sweetness of a gentle rain." "I love you in confluence." BC, I could go on and quote more lines that I think are exquisite, but then I'd be rewriting the whole poem! It's great to have you back! EA |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Bill, Good one, enjoyed the read. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
bill...i love your poems of romance...helen |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
yes i love your poems too,sir enjoyed |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Good Morn' BC....the pitter patter of tiny drops...so soothing, as are your words... |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
A very nice feel to this piece, especially the first 2 lines and the last eight. Now even though E.A. really likes the 'confluence' line, it seems incongruent by the meanings in my dictionary. Therefore, could explain its use here, for me. It's a word that rhymes well, but the definitions I'm given seem awry of the content as I understand it. So, I need help. hehe, what's new, I need help a lot! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Oh Bill, this is soooooo beautiful, I love the sound of the rain too as it always sounds like percussion music to me and is soothing! (big hugggsssss) This is lovely, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Bill, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bill Nature can inspire in so many ways...this is beautiful and softly romantic. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
very nice BC..I am listening to the rain today, it makes for a pleasant read of your poetry. hugss M |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Now Bill, you know I love this one. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ah Bill...you are just SO romantic!! ~Huge Hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
BC - I really have missed your radiant words. I hope we hear that pitter patter soon; we are so dry and desperate for rain. There is nothing more romantic than loving on a rainy afternoon. Hugs, Marti Every now and then take a good look at something not made |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Terrific way of tying it all together Bill... much enjoyed. jwesley |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
A beautiful writing Bill, touching. Well done. If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very Nice...James |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
it is your talent, Poet Bill, that your words convey a sensation not unlike a warm soft rain that lays on skin like the rays of a beginnign summer day. JkF |
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