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catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

0 posted 2002-09-13 09:05 AM

My love for you is gentle disarray
not logical, no order found at all
it convolutes a little more each day
till nothing remains but my subtle fall.

Your love for me, still living in my head
though try I might, you do not want to stay
you love me well enough within your bed
but later simply steal it all away.

Our love was once a passion of an age
a feel of solid strength and heart was there
disintigrated now inside a cage
I live entrapped, I can't go anywhere.

And still my soul will cry for you at night
I clamor for your love deep in my heart
and hope in solitude you make it right
while hating life that forces us apart.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2002-09-13 09:19 AM

a painful longing for more...well said

( please note: this was to a be a one line reply but in lieu of discussions taking place in other parts of PIP, felt it neccessary to add the following disclaimer:

This reply is sincere and intended to reflect the fact I read and enjoyed the words you shared.)

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

2 posted 2002-09-13 09:42 AM

I agree with Cpat, it is filled with yearning and well put together, very smooth.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

3 posted 2002-09-13 10:00 AM

"...it convolutes a little more each day..."

This line imparts so much...

Earth Angel

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

4 posted 2002-09-13 10:03 AM

I loved it

PS I never could keep my love in a jar

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

5 posted 2002-09-13 11:14 AM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Sandra, I know just how you feel and if anyone in the world is deserving of finding this beautiful love, it is you and I know it will happen and together your fears and thoughts of hate will be replaced by endless bliss! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sandra, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Moonlight Romeo

Senior Member

since 2001-09-10

Posts 982
The heart of you

6 posted 2002-09-13 12:21 PM

I find that I'm hating life more every day as well.

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

7 posted 2002-09-13 12:24 PM

Sometimes life does suck. Good write.

Cold hands means a warm heart

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

8 posted 2002-09-13 12:35 PM

Sweet peace to tender longing...a most difficult part of love. ThisDiamond

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

9 posted 2002-09-13 12:48 PM

"My love for you is gentle disarray
not logical, no order found at all
it convolutes a little more each day
till nothing remains but my subtle fall."

Pain expressed so beautifully. Caught once again in the convolutions of love?

athena4
Senior Member

since 2000-12-10

Posts 622

10 posted 2002-09-14 09:51 AM

Sandra,
So beautiful, so poignant,and sadly...so true. With everything else being so difficult in this life, and such a day to day challenge, why can't the most important facet of why we are here be gracefully given to us? Your words have painted that sad potrait, that unfortunately, many of us own....
Love, Elise

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

11 posted 2002-09-14 11:19 AM

My love for you is gentle disarray
not logical, no order found at all
it convolutes a little more each day
till nothing remains but my subtle fall.

Had some love in a jar once, opened the lid to put in a lightning bug and it must of escaped...lol.
Enjoyed this, Sandra.

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

12 posted 2002-09-14 12:03 PM

And still my soul will cry for you at night
I clamor for your love deep in my heart
and hope in solitude you make it right
while hating life that forces us apart.

Beautiful words Sandra....don't we all
try to do this at one time or another?

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