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Falling Through Cracks
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Falling Through Cracks |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Falling Through Cracks I fell through a crack of mental track While searching for a fancies employ And I tumbled and fell ass over back Until I hung up on subtle annoy. Stuck like a plum the end of a thumb I hung and could not make sense of the place But that was the outcome of drinking rum And kicking the base of the case I thought that I could find a field A greener pasture of display Where I could harvest up a yield Of pleasures and pleasures array. But all I found was the hot taste of spice That swelled my tongue, fired my rind And sounds that drummed just like rolled dice That rattled the whole of my mind. So watch were you walk those living cracks It’s so easy to fall ass over back. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
very well said... liked it so much... Thanks, Seymour for the sound advice... Regards, Sudhir |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  BRAVO!!! Yes, we always need to look ahead and watch our step as we may be stepping over greener pastures or slipping on cracks! (big hugggssssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I am very careful not to step on any cracks---I wouldn't want to "break my mother's back"! ----that may sound weird to the rest of the world, but I'm sure another Canadian would get it! Sounds like you had a bad experience!---but you expressed it with a delightful sense of humour! Earth Angel |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Stuck like a plum the end of a thumb I hung and could not make sense of the place But that was the outcome of drinking rum And kicking the base of the case Not sure what I'm doing up at this hour, let alone reading poetry but I saw the word rum and that was enough to warrant a response. Quite an easy fall to make, as you have stated. The recovery...not so fluid. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Morning Sy! Thanks for the enjoyable morning read and accompanying smiles. ~Hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sudhir, Thank you for the like and reply. Noah, Yes we should always think of what we do. Earth Angel We have the same saying here. LOL Duncan, I totaly agree, recovery is not so fluid. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Enchantress, A smile is always a good way to start the day Hugs back. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Delightful read Sey! Well done. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Gentle Spirit And may the delight be with you throughout the day. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Now you've got the big grin going! Gotta watch out for the spicey sass and the backward fall of brass! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, You keep shining and I'll keep watching. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Seymour - a morning grin with this one, but also the grimace of how quickly one can slip through those cracks, and how difficult it is to squeeze back into the light. Well done dear poet. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
all of this too too funny really liked the line "hung up on subtle annoy" Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Chris, It's the subtle ones you have to watch out for. Thank you LOL VAS, Don't we all? LOL |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
SY~ With much truth....you enlighten us with your words.... Lauren~ I need some distraction |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Big grins here, Sy |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Bottoms up! Enjoyed. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Seymour darling heart what is this doing so far down the list? Have the PiP’s people lost their taste? Or is it simply that there are too many poems and not enough time. Very likely because everyone knows you are a superb writer. Or if they don’t they really don’t have any taste. This is utterly utterly wonderful When I think you have reached the peak of your perfection you then write something that is so perfect and full of truth I find myself saying this is incredible. In this case I love the subtle interplay between verses as always darling heart your writing is tres tres bon. You of course know I adore this don’t you? Mmmmm I do!   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
ROTFL. You 'crack' me up sometimes! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lauren, Thank you dear. Interloper, Thanks for the grins. RSWells And a toast to you too. Marsha, So nice to read your delicious comment. Have a good one and I 'll see you soon. Midnitsun, Cute, thank you sweet. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
many many times...good advice written out here. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Thank you passing shadows. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Believe it or not, Sy.... This is the first time I have smiled all day today...  ~ hugs and a grinLyra |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy Since you made Lyra smile..you get a  , and since you made me shake my head in wonder, you get a Thank you for keeping your sense of humor intact. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lyra, Mades me happy to make you smile. Martie, Thank you and Hugs and back[This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (09-09-2002 03:41 PM).] |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Lots of good advise here my friend. And nothing worse than falling through the cracks of life. Hugs, Marti Every now and then take a good look at something not made |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marti, Thank you for the read and reply. |
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