Serenity Challenge: "A drowning man..."

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Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

0 posted 2002-09-09 07:02 AM

the tall window shows
an uninspiring sight
of a city dressed in grey
shrouded by mysterious clouds,
that even without bearing rain
keep their constant threatening
of a pre-emptive attack
on an end-summer snack
at central park

but even the most feared
strike of million-volt lightning
should do well to know that
a drowning man is not troubled by rain
and even with all the dark clouds
hovering about like satellites
the snack would be ordered
and would be eaten too

and the event of the rain
would be shrugged off
as just another spot of
bad luck -- a twist of fate
an error in judgement
of the higher power
while the hungered mouths
would feed on wet food
and swallow the moist tears

while, the detached spectator
from the dry side of the window
shall sip his next swallow of
fresh orange juice, knowing that
he, the selfish, drowning man
is not troubled by the rain
either!

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2002-09-09 08:14 AM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Sudhir, God Bless You, I can see thoughts of September 11 through these words and together we all rise and not drown through the tears and darkness! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is wonderfully heartfelt challenge, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sudhir, thank you for sharing!

May love and light alwyas shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2002-09-09 08:56 AM

Sudhir,
It is a good write but considering the single author both answers are inevitable.
Enjoyed

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2002-09-09 09:13 AM

Excellent write Sudhir.
Much enjoyed.
~Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
So you won't ever forget me ~

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

4 posted 2002-09-09 09:42 AM

Wow.

This was a wonderfully creative, intense challenge response. Your drowning man was right outside my window.

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

5 posted 2002-09-09 10:48 AM

Thank you all so very much...

Regards,
sudhir

WhiteRose
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since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

6 posted 2002-09-09 04:38 PM

Sudhir, very nicely done. You lived up to the challenge beautifully with this insightful piece.

[This message has been edited by WhiteRose (09-09-2002 04:38 PM).]

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

7 posted 2002-09-12 08:12 AM

Thanks a lot WhiteRose...

Regards,
Sudhir

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

8 posted 2002-09-12 12:42 PM

Challenge well met, dear friend. I find the world fascinating as it is, but through your eyes? All the more...

My gratitude and appreciation for this'n!

Hugs, sudhir!

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

9 posted 2002-09-12 05:04 PM

O Serene one, it was but my pleasure... thanks for the chance...

and thank you for your forever well-meaning words...

regards,
sudhir

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