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Balloons |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers 
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Purple red green yellow Colourful dots in blue skies Just balloons free From the grasp of little hands Children's screams echo through the grounds Some cry for their losses Others weep for just one chance To hold on to something so precious I think LOVE is like a balloon Colourful and exciting Yet there is always a fear It might burst and cause pain Holding on for so long You will feel tired soon Yet release the string and You will lose it forever Some hold on too tight but That is not the way The beauty lies in its freedom To sway in the wind There are others holding too long Doing all to hold it close Yet life will soon seep out All efforts go to waste Some get a chance to hold it Yet they know not how to treasure it Dangling it around their little finger The string soon loosens itself And there are those who Walk around the fair looking For just one balloon One balloon that is up for grabs A balloon for each person Love for all It does not seem too hard Just handle it with care! _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Hello Mon Cherie! Haven't heard from you in a while!Yes love must be treated with care I think so it won't blow up in your face..nice one |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Wonderful thoughts about love... I think we need to appreciate love... Too many take love for granted...James |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mon Cherie The content is excellent and I enjoyed the read. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
nodding and agreeing....yep, so true your words. Excellent writing! I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~~(Garth) |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Some are lucky enough to find that perfect balloon ... well rounded, flexible, not to grounded yet irresistable! Guess love can be full of hot air ... Good write! |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Hi Mon Cherie, It is good to hear from you again. I am allergic to everyday balloons, so does that mean that when I find Mr. Right he will be the most perfect mylar balloon out there? Mylar balloons are usually silver, will he have money as well? Seriously I thought your poem was very beautiful, and I'm glad that I had the cance to read such a beauty. Dawn |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This is so delightful.....Well written I enjoyed the read very much! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
What a wonderful and creative concept Florence! I love how you wove your thoughts of love into this imaginative piece, very much enjoyed!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I loved your analogy. 1derful concept Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Thank you everyone! Really delighted to see so many comments for my poetry. hehe.I was at a roadshow promoting my company's products when this came to my mind. Lotsa balloons around, and plenty more stuck on the canvas ceiling. I was really tired then, and pretty depressed, but I was glad to churn out something that bonders on truth and hope. hehe.  _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Dawn, I don't know much about balloons, but I know what is your everyday balloons.... But what is a mylar balloon?? hehe..yeah! hope your Mr Right is as extraordinary as a mylar balloon, and I guess he'll have money it's just a matter of how much, so I hope it's the more the merrier...._,,,^.^,,,_ |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Nice work, Mon Cherie...dig the analogy and the imagery here...liked these lines muchly The beauty lies in its freedom To sway in the wind but as you said in your poem, balloons deflate gradually...how do you depict everlasting love via balloons then?  a thought-provoking read much enjoyed..i think i am that sort of person who waits for the balloon to be served to me..heehee  |
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