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Intimacy |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA 
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I want to explore you To see inside the you that thinks and feels To hear your wants needs and feelings I want to feel the caresses of your thoughts.. as they tumble against my mind I want you to explore me.. to want to know me.. to want to find the me I hide from everyone else.. To have you feel my thoughts and soul embrace your mind and spirit I want us to join our spirits and fantasies...so we explode in delight I want to know you – I want to hold you Be my best friend...and care about what I offer you Be my best friend.. and let me be me… |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Excellent poem on intimacy Gooknight!! I like the last line summation. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I think you've captured the essence of intimacy so well here, Paul... in a lovely poem.  ~ friendly hugsLyra |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Paul Such an important message was portrayed through your words. We can't pretend to be something we not and people just have to accept us as we are for eventually we must lower our masks to reveal our true selves. Take care.....Sue Suetang |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
ethome - thanks for the kind words and yes being who we are is an apt summary Lyra - for someone to say I have captured the essence - wow I am honored by those words from you!!! thanks Sue - how true your words are and thanks for your insights!!! Paul |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Goodknight There is a deep place of soul that connects at times with or without words or touch, it is seeing and knowing without being shown or told.... Your poem is intimate like that. I enjoyed the view through your eyes. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - what wonderful insights and wisdom you offer - thanks so for your words - Paul |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I want to explore you To see inside the you that thinks and feels To hear your wants needs and feelings I want to feel the caresses of your thoughts.. as they tumble against my mind ------------------------------------------- Paul, I love this stanza as I don't think.. now I may be wrong here, and have all the men of PiP up in arms...lol...but, I don't think too many men think this way and really want to get to know a woman this deeply. then....summing it all up with... Be my best friend...and care about what I offer you Be my best friend.. and let me be me… -------------------------------------------- makes for one beautiful, sensual write my friend....well done!! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Nancy - my how powerful your comments are to this fledgling poet. thanks for the insights and for you very nice words. Paul |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Paul, you are bringing out my envy.... No, seriously, I am pleased to read this poem. MUCH MUCH truth in your words...Yes, I agree with Nancy...the animal instincts of primal man sometimes detract from the needs of a woman.... Like they say... Listen...and then listen some more... Like the Pic....Now I don't feel like I am the only old man around here... Enjoyed this one...thanx... |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I really love this poem.  It makes me think happy thoughts.Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
magnus - from one old man to another - thanks for your insights and comments and for paying tribute to my gray beard and lost hair  PaulLoner - appreciate your kind words - Paul |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Lost hair!?! Where? I have been collecting it...trying to make a toupee... Balladeer tried to get me one, but he fell on his sword on this one... Larry C and I did a duet together a couple of months ago, you would have enjoyed it. Had a few hair remarks in it... You and I have one common ground...the smooth landing zone on the top of our heads...LOL.. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
yes a very clean landing zone - no trees or shrubs or grass there more LOL |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"I want us to join our spirits and fantasies...so we explode in delight I want to know you – I want to hold you Be my best friend...and care about what I offer you Be my best friend.. and let me be me…"  (smiles) Oh my gosh, this is soooooo lovely, sweet friend, you are indeed a wonderful and sensitive man and I know your love will always be blessed to have you for so few men nowadays seem to understand that feeling to the heart is what makes a strong love and you have that special heart! (big huggsssssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Paul, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Noah - thanks for the very nice comments and for showing such love - Paul |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I wondered how a poem got so many replies and now I know....it deserves them. Very fine writing here, Paul  |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
The open book, uncovered... A delight to read my friend. ThisDiamond |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
balladeer - thanks for your generous comment - Paul diamond - thanks for your insights - Paul |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
beautiful.... some are afraid to show their true self... isn't that a shame... ~~ Connie ~~ |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Connie - thanks for your very insightful comments - appreciate your reading and commenting on my poem - Paul |
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N orth Carolina Girl Senior Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 962NC,USA |
Goodknight, A wonderful poem on the feelings of a man and woman. Juanita |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Goodknight - great write about feelings and intimacy. So much said here, excellent... BC |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Paul, this describes to me, very nicely, the perfect relationship. Sandra |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
*jaw drops to the ground* Ohh wow! that's all I can say, your words echo what I've been dreaming for the longest time, to find my best friend to let me be me...sweet!! Kristen [This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (07-27-2002 04:50 PM).] |
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Tea Lady Junior Member
since 2002-07-11
Posts 26 |
Intimacy....."In to me see". You have captured it completely. I applaud! |
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sodpossom Senior Member
since 2001-06-15
Posts 723N.C |
Very intimate indeed.Very nice! |
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paladin
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. |
A friend is someone who knows all about you and likes you anyway. paladin |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Paul ~ I liked this so much. Intimacy is such a wonderful thing between two people. The line, '...Be my best friend.. and let me be me…' is right on. And yet, it is so hard. Seems we are always trying to change each other, when who we really need to change sometimes, is ourselves. Great write - Hugs, Marti "Even if life is full of thorns, I still embrace it for I know that in between those thorns, there is a rose worth all the pain." |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Careful Paul.....next thing you know... the ladies will think there really is a guy out there that knows what intimacy is all about..... Excellent poem... The hand has been dealt....now show the cards! |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I think this is pretty much what we all want. Well done. Nan(Pilgrim variety) |
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