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Help me name it |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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She cries milk tears. He holds the glass to catch and drink them. She makes flowers. He finds their home within her hair. She writes seashore. He sculpts piecemeal the shells of his eyes. She draws sand hills. He climbs their peaks to taste that dust. She drives poets. He verses slowly line to lineage. She sees doorways. He frames their empty face in air. She knows song bells. He makes them wring in slow rainment. She is his hope. He is hers for holding strong. |
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Anvrill Senior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 710in the interzone now |
My baby writes like Robert Smith.  Actually, this has got a similar pace (though far saner content) to Icing Sugar... I just noticed that.impress me, or be discarded mpc [This message has been edited by Anvrill (08-10-2002 11:31 PM).] |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Glad you enjoyed Lori. And glad you appropriated my words for a cool sig! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 BRAVO!!! Oh Michael, this is beautiful, sweet friend, I believe love always bears an ultimate hope for all of life and I wish this special gift to always shine in your heart! (big hugggsssssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I love the poem, Mr.Squirrel... absolutely love it... How bout using the last line... "He is hers for holding strong" The first line is an interesting title also "She cries milk tears" I think either of those will draw readers to read it.  ~ poetic rodent hugsLyra |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Glad you all enjoyed. |
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