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BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

0 posted 2002-08-08 04:23 AM

Speaking of my Dear Diary
what became someone else's best seller
running away with my dreams.

Penned in private shorthand
dedicated to the hours loving one another
mixing my words that don't fit quite the same.

Omiting acknowledgment
or credit to the inspiration
in my dreams locked neatly away.

Tucked inside My Dear Diary
keeping my secrets hidden
between the lines written so small.

Offsetting the predictable
ends as the beginning
with different meanings to it all.

Metaphors and rhyme
prose and cons
scattered in verse
as it always was

~one with

Crowded in an empty space
like the fine print that no one ever reads
what only my hairdresser

and my Dear Diary know for sure~

[This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (08-08-2002 04:34 AM).]

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

1 posted 2002-08-08 06:08 AM

I read this once through entirely,
then I set back and I read it again
verse by verse.

Each verse stands on
it's own and is so very well crafted
and just flows right into the next
with continuing thoughts that make the
entire piece a complete masterpiece.

This is wonderful and now I am going to
fold this up and into my lil box of gems
it goes!! I enjoyed this delight of write
incredibly so, thank you for the morning smile.
sincerely,
Donna

Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal.

{on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me}

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

2 posted 2002-08-08 06:26 AM

ms bluezy, heck I gotta make up stuff for my diary anymore...something about "changing the arrowhead bottle" just don't seem like best seller stuff...cool poem babe.

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

3 posted 2002-08-08 10:20 AM

Lori~

I have journals, upon journals....I love the depth of this, and the flow you have given these words....good, so good to see ya here....missed reading your words....

Lauren~

The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket
I lean against the wind pretend I am weightless and in this moment I am happy

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2002-08-08 02:22 PM

(smiles) Yay!!! Yes, I love writing in my journal too and captivating many certain thoughts down! (kiss on cheek) This is excellent, sweet friend, I love it, keep weiting your heart upon paper, we all love you so much! (kiss on cheek) This is beautiful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

5 posted 2002-08-09 12:17 PM

Mine are all written on parched paper and tucked under the band of lining inside my hat.

I admit I had to read this one a few times but one thing I noticed right away is that the flow of thoughts carried smoothly from one word to the next on into the seperate verses and then that essential pause of
"~one with"

Very nicely done and I much enjoyed.

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

6 posted 2002-08-09 12:45 PM

Very nicely done, Lori...
I found your last verse interesting because only your hair dresser and diary know for sure....
Is that about your blondness? LOL

~ hugs from the inquiring chipmunk

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

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