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Pacific Pleasures (Pantoum) |
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CSKpoet Senior Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 845Island in Paradise 
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 A mirror of blue and aqua hue Glass that expands over endless miles While I sit and enjoy the view Flowers bloom on the verdant isles Glass that expands over endless miles Melodies float upon rainy mists Flowers bloom on the verdant isles Where ocean waves and blue skies kiss Melodies float upon rainy mists Mermaids play and sea nymphs hide Where ocean waves and blue skies kiss I listen to the roaring tide Mermaids play and sea nymphs hide While I sit and enjoy the view I listen to the roaring tide A mirror of blue and aqua hue Poetry is: |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Pantoums are among my favorites..  This slightly abbreviated piece is particularly enticing, as it's a wonderfully poetic visage of the great blue sea - That's always a soft spot in my heart..  |
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CSKpoet Senior Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 845Island in Paradise |
Nan : that is quite a compliment and I thank you so very much. I find these pantoums hard to do, well...I am still learning.. so any constructive suggestions are invited and appreciated. aloha, cher Poetry is: |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Cheryl, I remember my first attempt at a Pantoum.......uhhhhgggg.....they are so hard to do and have only written a few, but you made this look incredibly easy and your theme is just beautiful and that graphic just made me smile....I love the ocean. Well done dear poetess!! Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal. |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
These paradise poems are a delight for us who live with the everyday surroundings of a small town. There are a million messages, in a million bottles, you just have to know which one to pull out of the ocean. [This message has been edited by WhiteRose (08-08-2002 10:38 AM).] |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Here's our Workshop outline of the structure of a Pantoum, folks - Enjoy... /pip/Forum22/HTML/000475.html |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 Yay!!! Awwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, I love pantoums but they are indeed hard to write and you make such beautiful ocean life come alive here, yay!!! (kiss on cheek) This is breathtaking, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Cheryl, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I LOVE THIS POEM! (and now I need to try a pantoum) |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
CSKpoet - the Pacific written about in it's splendor. You did well with this write... BC |
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