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Bound and Gagged
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Bound and Gagged |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York 
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I am battling the entire world its everyone against me I am left alone to feel abused hated and dumb to believe anyone cared I don't know what to do i refuse to stay here but I refuse to go away I refuse to be locked in your chains bound and gagged I feel |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Another very powerful poem. Keep writing, in the writing we sometimes are released from feelings such as this. There are a million messages, |
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subterranean boho New Member
since 2002-08-07
Posts 3 |
This poem captures a sense of helplessness and a fight to keep your own identity... in few words. Nice. (I don't know if you want constructive criticism, etc, so let us know.) :-) |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York |
Critism doesnt bother me |
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subterranean boho New Member
since 2002-08-07
Posts 3 |
Okay. :-) I think there are too many "I am"s in there. If I may be so rude: ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I am battling the entire world it's everyone against me Alone I feel abused hated and dumb Led to believe anyone cared I don't know what to do I refuse to stay here but I refuse to go away I refuse to be locked in your chains bound and gagged I feel ~~~~~~~~~~~~~ But what do I know? Peace, |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York |
There is only 2 I am's in there. why'd ya waste your breath? lol j/k |
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paladin
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. |
You need to talk to other people about this.You could fall into the trap of believing you are the only person in the world who has had these feelings.Trust me you are not alone.The posts at passions are filled with what you describe. paladin |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kellie_Cantrell Well no one said it was easy, enjoyed. |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York |
I write poetry so people of all walks of life can relate to it. Not because that necessarily is how I feel. I live a happy life. With an occasional bump in the road but I am still happy. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
look within yourself, Kellie... I think we all hold the keys to what we perceive to be our chains. I'm so glad it isn't about you, though... A Good write on a thought provoking subject  ~ chipmunk hugsLyra |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Kellie, keep your chin up, sweet friend, for you have the keys deep in your heart and the first door is always unlocked by loving and believing in yourself! (sigh) My thoughts are with you, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kellie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Kellie, you made a very good point. Sometimes when we become a community, we begin to think that the writer is writing simply from their point of view, and this is not always so. For example, I sometimes make an attempt to write as a fair and glorious lady...truth be told, I'm a tomboyish klutz. But I can imagine, and that is what you are doing, and this is good. We have to remember that a true writer is going to stretch beyond the limits of their own life, look out at others, and write of that. If we, as writers, can make it seem that much more believable, then we are doing our job. Suetang is an excellent example of a good writer who can make one feel that she is actually wearing the shoes of the person she is writing of; or has been in an experience that she sees others going through. If you think that people are going to believe that this is you [if you have written it so convincingly] then a disclaimer down the thread is a good thing to leave behind, such as you did today. Good job. [This message has been edited by Sunshine (08-07-2002 08:16 PM).] |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Kellie, You write very well of a feeling that many, mostly women....have experienced for generations.....Not allowing the bonds to hold is certainly the key to freedom and individuality... |
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