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. . .Mapping your love . . . with muse
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. . .Mapping your love . . . with muse |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Mapping your love (with muse) My eyes follow, in gentle sway, a subtle rise and fall around the curving byways of you. I marvel at every peak, gasp with each valley's depth, barely catching my breath on the plateaus of you. Exquisite topography alters with the reading of you. My fingers yearn to map my eyes’ journeys so that, even in the dark, exploration by Braille might find all the sighs of you. Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. [This message has been edited by Interloper (08-06-2002 10:50 AM).] |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
My fingers yearn to map my eyes’ journeys so that, even in the dark, exploration by Braille might find all the sighs of you. An exquisite collection of words. Well done. Love Seduces Joy From The Heart |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah...I like them both, this AND the draft! |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
you and the muse do well |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I thought it fitting to post this upon my return to the pages of blue  White Rose ~ Thank you Sunshine ~ I'm happy you remembered the original Helen ~ Yes, they are inspiring to me Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. [This message has been edited by Interloper (08-06-2002 10:49 AM).] |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautifully written Interloper ... a wonderful interlude with your muse, much enjoyed. Best wishes, /Kit |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
oooh, I like this rendition, too it is a smoother read, I think, the feel is a tiny bit different, yet I can't explain it maybe it's just because I read others between Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Its like the difference between black coffee and coffee with a little bit of sugar in it... Just a bit sweeter and smoother... but both are excellent.  ~ hugs from my quill to yoursLyra |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Kit ~ Thank you for not saying that my muse soothed the beast Virginia ~ Humph! Smoother, huh? Well, you're right Lyra ~ Sweeter? OK, OK, I give up. My muse was (and still is, to my knowledge) female. Whaddayawant, I'm only a guy ... Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwww, I have missed you and your lovely words so much, sweet friend, this is beautiful just as your first draft is, may your love always be the compass rose to your dreams, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light awlays shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
so that, even in the dark, exploration by Braille might find all the sighs of you. ========================== OH YES!! Interloper is back! *sigh* You and your muse du-et so well together. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
InterLoper~ Enjoyed both ... but could you show me that Braille part again ? Darn ... I need practice !  (and then again ... there's the part I can't mention here~ Tee-Hee ... you're back ... I'm bad ! Do that e-mail thingie !  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Noah ~ Thank you my friend Nancy Lee ~ {swoon} Marge ~ Hah You got it, gal friend!Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Blue Kitty Member
since 2002-08-05
Posts 72Virginia |
You might be able to read that brail map, but I wants to know if you can refold it? A-musing U R. P. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Enjoyed this, and I have missed reading your words here. Sandra |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Bob darling heart this is exceptional, the draft was good the second is spectacular. This is exceptional writing as always your writing is so very very special and I love it utterly. Is that what you mean by topography well you are certainly top darling boy and you can…….. you can fill in the blanks love, otherwise they’ll move me to adult. Let your fingers to the walking *smile You know when I do eventually get in here I run as fast as my little fingers can carry me to your poem, where in contentment I sit myself down at the feet of the master and gaze in wonder at you. drinking in the sparkling air that is finer, and more rarefied around you than almost anywhere else. What I’m trying to say and taking far too long about it is I love your writing. This is another of your utter delights and I love it utterly utterly utterly. as always Mushy   Breathe through the heat of our desire Thy coolness and they balm Let sense be dumb let flesh retire Speak through the earthquake wind and fire [This message has been edited by Marsha (08-07-2002 06:34 PM).] |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Some excellent musing here....Nicely done 'loper..... |
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