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Professor Gloom
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of Depression

0 posted 2002-08-02 08:49 AM


I walk the path by ruins,
Litter blows cross broken glass,
A empty box none play in
Amidst the too tall scrub grass.
A playground;
So broken,
Forsaken,
Forgotten.
The path leads by destruction
Red bricks burnt and fallen down,
No one tries reclamation,
This is the bad part of town.
Once a home,
Just a spot,
Some place not,
Now forgot.
I walk this path of ruins,
Feeling the loss all around,
Trying to just imagine,
When filled with a happy sound.
Not ruin
Forsaken,
Now forgot.

Gloom
Inspired from 1slick_lady’s Ruin Runs Thick



© Copyright 2002 Aszard Drazlom - All Rights Reserved
Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09
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1 posted 2002-08-02 08:51 AM


so often these places of life for the children are forgotten.  You wrote of this loneliness well.  Brava.

Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal.

{on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me}


Professor Gloom
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of Depression
2 posted 2002-08-02 08:58 AM


Thank you, Gentle Spirit,
For your kind praise.

Gloom

WhiteRose
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somebody's dungeon
3 posted 2002-08-02 10:25 AM


I like this. Very well written. The flow was nice.
Zinsser
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Calif.
4 posted 2002-08-03 11:20 AM


very well said.....
~~ Connie ~~

WhileIWasGone
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since 2002-07-18
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5 posted 2002-08-03 12:50 PM


Very nice ....I enjoy reading your work.

DeaDiAmore

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
6 posted 2002-08-03 01:44 PM


Professor Gloom
Good inspiration, well done, enjoyed.

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