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Open Poetry #21

Walk of Ruins

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2002-08-02 08:49 AM

I walk the path by ruins,
Litter blows cross broken glass,
A empty box none play in
Amidst the too tall scrub grass.
A playground;
So broken,
Forsaken,
Forgotten.
The path leads by destruction
Red bricks burnt and fallen down,
No one tries reclamation,
This is the bad part of town.
Once a home,
Just a spot,
Some place not,
Now forgot.
I walk this path of ruins,
Feeling the loss all around,
Trying to just imagine,
When filled with a happy sound.
Not ruin
Forsaken,
Now forgot.

Gloom
Inspired from 1slick_lady’s Ruin Runs Thick

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

1 posted 2002-08-02 08:51 AM

so often these places of life for the children are forgotten. You wrote of this loneliness well. Brava.

Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal.

{on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me}

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

2 posted 2002-08-02 08:58 AM

Thank you, Gentle Spirit,
For your kind praise.

Gloom

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

3 posted 2002-08-02 10:25 AM

I like this. Very well written. The flow was nice.

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

4 posted 2002-08-03 11:20 AM

very well said.....
~~ Connie ~~

WhileIWasGone
Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 486

5 posted 2002-08-03 12:50 PM

Very nice ....I enjoy reading your work.

DeaDiAmore

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

6 posted 2002-08-03 01:44 PM

Professor Gloom
Good inspiration, well done, enjoyed.

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