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Open Poetry #21

SLIPPING.........slipping.....

RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

0 posted 2002-07-29 08:49 PM

That ancient rib is back
the one man never needed
and it's placement is confining to my heart

It has been so long
since I breathed a hearty song
I sometimes fear I'll lose the festive art

The sun is an assault
it's heat slams shut all doors
the wide world as confining as a drawer

Far too many smirks,
not smiles, from greed eyed people
who think that human commerce is a war

Life so full of tears
that ideal Love's an ocean,
sorrow's hilltop makes me a mountain man

The crowd swells so
that strange is commonplace,
amusement for moving faces in a van

Wanting you so badly
went badly so sadly
went you for my want of you

My seventeenth thousandth
eight hundred sixty fifth day
vacuumed all my hope

So somber, frozen faced
I lay and contemplate
the gun, the knife, the rope

"Happy people have no history" - French Proverb

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2002-07-29 08:54 PM

Whoa!!! very Dark. Yet very enjoyed!

Cold hands means a warm heart

Samantha G Kennedy
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since 2002-07-27

Posts 131
Kent England

2 posted 2002-07-29 08:55 PM

a truly powerful piece, this certainly packs a punch ~

"The sun is an assault
it's heat slams shut all doors
the wide world as confining as a drawer"

i found this totally unique, the last stanza hits hard

Awesome

Sammie

^i^

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2002-07-30 11:15 AM

Richard

Some promises should never be made. To cry is part of what makes love so grand.

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2002-07-30 01:23 PM

Slip knot thee into the gray
my rope is broke, I hang on fray
I braid the strings into an end
and now at least my rope's in mend.

Couldn't help it, Richard...not after the promise...

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2002-07-30 01:31 PM

Sir, you are an amazing writer!
This one stopped me cold...
and made me think.
Excellent!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

rwood
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since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

6 posted 2002-07-30 10:16 PM

So much expression it hurts...Gosh..that's a lot of days to be you.~wink* Be proud of it.
Missing rib and all.

Sincerely,
Reg

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