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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2002-07-29 04:06 AM


ribbons
woven intricate
ties of silk--
a worm's parade
I bind my hand
upon the left
lest
he point
to mine own grave...
I bind my foot
upon the right
to keep her step
in intimace
oil
stains
the colors deep--
I light the flames--
I breathe incense.

I play the flickers
with my hand--
I touch the stones
of altar spread.
I circle salt
widdershins
I tuck my intellect in bed.

There can be
no "me" in me--
a chalice, full,
can not be filled.
My voice is silence
singing still...
I feel pulse
in wrist of dead.


Tandem dance
of universe
keeping rhythm of the drum.
I am cyclone--
tunnel wind--
I become myself, undone.

Born within the particles
of dust kicked by my feet--
ribbons loosed across the sky
as I labor--birthing me...


[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (07-29-2002 03:14 PM).]

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Samantha G Kennedy
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Kent England
1 posted 2002-07-29 07:09 AM


There can be
no "me" in me--
a chalice, full,
can not be filled.
My voice is silence
singing still...
I feel pulse
in wrist of dead.


you gave birth to some excellent imagery here...this is a breath taking read, one i shall come back too

awesome

Sammie

^i^

Sunshine
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2 posted 2002-07-29 10:24 AM



For so many reasons, this is wonderful...
and I certainly am enjoying your "new" name...

doreen peri
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3 posted 2002-07-29 10:51 AM


damn gurl!!!! this packs a powerful punch!! it SOCKS it to ya!! *whew*.. hehe

love this line

"I become myself, undone."

and yet another pome which proves yet again why i call you harpo

what's with the blaze thing? you on fire again??? you didn't have to add that! everybody knows yer HOT!

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
4 posted 2002-07-29 11:05 AM


serenity,
Wonderful write, so many good lines here I can't pick one out.

Janet Marie
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5 posted 2002-07-29 11:32 AM


ribbons
woven intricate
ties of silk--
a worm's parade
I bind my hand
upon the left
lest
he point
to mine own grave...
I bind my foot
upon the right
to keep her step
in intimace
oil
stains
the colors deep--
I light the flames--
I breathe incense.

=============================
Tandem dance
of universe
keeping rhythm of the drum.
I am cyclone--
tunnel wind--
I become myself, undone.

Born within the particles
of dust kicked by my feet--
ribbons loosed across the sky
as I labor--birthing me...
Born within the particles
of dust kicked by my feet--
ribbons loosed across the sky
as I labor--birthing me...

===================================


You live up to your name with this one me twin..
set the night on fire baby...
I LOVE the imagery in this KA..and the metaphor for YOU.
This is one very very cool write me girlie...
love when ya candle dance
mothyme

serenity blaze
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6 posted 2002-07-29 02:00 PM


Thank you all most kindly---and Doreen? Remember this?
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*ahem* pssst...we are getting married Thursday...REALLY. THIS TIME FOR REAL. We got the license and everything...

serenity blaze
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7 posted 2002-07-29 02:01 PM


ooops....forgot to mention...the name change is in honor of my new last name--which will be "Blaise."
Sven
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8 posted 2002-07-29 04:38 PM


let the fires burn. . .

you know that I loved this one. . . for way too many reasons. . . just hope that my own dance is as creative. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

devina
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Cali
9 posted 2002-07-29 04:42 PM


Glad to understand the name change sis...was wondering on you...thought you might have just caught fire or somethen...
grins...

You've drown me in the mystic you Karen...oh I do sooo enjoy this...

think my oils would mesh nicely with yourn...

love to ya girlie!!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



Enchantress
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Canada eh.
10 posted 2002-07-29 04:54 PM


serenity blaze..you sure do rock!
*and the name really suits you!*
Loved this, I really did, for many reasons.
Will be thinking of you Thursday.
~Hugs~

bsquirrel
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11 posted 2002-07-29 06:05 PM


and and

Moody Guy who Likes Yr Poems

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Martie
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12 posted 2002-07-29 08:51 PM


serenity blaze

Amazed...many times by the way you write.  Congratulaions and big hugs for Thursday!


Goodknight
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since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386
Ohio, USA
13 posted 2002-07-29 08:58 PM


your poetry is so powerful and this one fills the bill - so many images - so many feelings evoked - loved it - love the new name and congrats on the reason for the name change!! Paul
wranx
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14 posted 2002-07-29 09:42 PM


Terrific again, Karenity.

Best wishes and Congratulations. I have a good feelin' about you. Don't know the mister, but figger he must be quite the Saintly Daemon.

Something for you and "others" in Open (a gift, sorta).


Save me a dance (with the Bridesmaids, too)

~wranx

The shortest distance between two points...
is sometimes, intolerable.      

Bukowski

serenity blaze
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Posts 27738

15 posted 2002-07-30 12:35 PM


heh heh heh-- wranx? no bridesmaids...my maid of honor? is our daughter, and the best man? our son. And I still have not agreed to wear shoes.

But I wanted to pop in and thank you all for the generosity--you all amaze me, time after time--I am running out of ways to thank you.

(serenity exits, saving herself for marriage...) - - -

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