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Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2002-07-27 10:47 PM

The mornings will grow colder
in later     August
flowers will be in vivid  color,
before the first snowfall carries them away
to their place among earth

The rains
will be bitter, making leaves tremble,
    fires of the mountain
will glow of all natural things

Twilight will    bleed
green and blue as one,
brilliant scenes  painted on tin
coverings

   {I will, as before}

Chase    the dark,
trace   the   black    sense of
something  familiar –

between the    lines,   shoulders, --
curves of your fingers
in your dark shadow

{Amber   of my    midnight
I  breathe you again}

This night will end, become jealous --
eyes of angels will      kiss the earth

I will stand in silence,
against the black sky;
tears will fall      when the dusting of snow
graces   my face

I still struggle not to sink --
    into small shapes of   water

The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket
I lean against the wind pretend I am weightless and in this moment I am happy

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (07-28-2002 12:21 AM).]

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

1 posted 2002-07-27 10:56 PM

Lauren, beautiful images in this...and
seems to be a few feelings too...

Hugs...hope you are doing OK now...

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2002-07-27 11:03 PM

(smiles) Awwwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, I have missed your gorgeous words so so much, this reminds me of September in Missouri where when I'mn with my grandparents we feel this sudden cool brezzes and the apple trees are budding in amber! (kiss on cheek) This is beautiful, sweet friend, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

3 posted 2002-07-27 11:04 PM

Lauren, this actually leaves me speechless, you convey emotion, and truths like seldom do, I have nothing clever to say after reading this except for 'sigh' it's a keeper!

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

Krishankins

Senior Member

since 2002-06-23

Posts 972
Texas

4 posted 2002-07-27 11:06 PM

Very beautifully chilling!!
I love this!! I'd pick a favorite line, but they're all so GOOD!!

Kris

A bird never flies so high that it can't hit the ground

sodpossom
Senior Member

since 2001-06-15

Posts 723
N.C

5 posted 2002-07-27 11:23 PM

Lovely images.Enjoyed it!

ctowen
Member Elite

since 2001-10-18

Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT

6 posted 2002-07-28 12:01 PM

"... eyes of angels will kiss the earth."

   Makes me think that the stars are watching me, as they slowly drop to the west and the new day births in the east ....
   .... makes me feel like a "DAY-dream Believer".

Moon Dust

Member Elite

since 1999-06-11

Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK

7 posted 2002-07-28 01:31 AM

Wow I'm amazed at your imagary

If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come?

Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

8 posted 2002-07-28 07:32 AM

With the heat as it is around the country,
this was a cooling read, on the sad side,
but still, I felt the chill...

thank you!

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

9 posted 2002-07-28 07:32 PM

I just love your beautiful imagery, Lauren...and this poem is a sure statement that you are back in Minnesota, where there are real winters.

~ chipmunk hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

JAR
Junior Member

since 2001-11-06

Posts 34

10 posted 2002-07-29 12:55 PM

{Amber of my midnight
I breathe you again}

amazing feelin'
I think you know how
I feel right?

JAR

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

11 posted 2002-07-29 01:38 PM

GreenEyes~
Such delicately decorated imagery~
Beautimous~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

NewEnglandlazurlu
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-01-04

Posts 7470
A Mountain Paradise

12 posted 2002-07-29 01:50 PM

Lauren, this is just magnificent. It conjured up such wonderful images in my mind. Thank you.

Hope you are feeling okay and mending.

Hugs, Marti

"Even if life is full of thorns, I still embrace it for I know that in between those thorns, there is a rose worth all the pain."

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

13 posted 2002-07-29 02:08 PM

Greeneyes - I don't know what to say, as I've already said it all about your writings. Beautiful, just beautiful. Praying that you are well...

BC

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

14 posted 2002-07-29 04:11 PM

So very very beautiful Lauren.
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

15 posted 2002-07-29 04:30 PM

what can I say that hasn't already been said??

well, let's try this:
you know the reflections. . . wonderful work. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

16 posted 2002-07-29 05:56 PM

{I will, as before}

Chase    the dark,
trace   the   black    sense of
something  familiar

between the    lines,   shoulders, --
curves of your fingers
in your dark shadow

{Amber   of my    midnight
I  breathe you again}

This night will end, become jealous --
eyes of angels will      kiss the earth

I will stand in silence,
against the black sky;
tears will fall      when the dusting of snow
graces   my face
====================================

time and time again you move me...you take me back to places I need to revisit.
time and time again you bring to mind the word exquisite.

jm

How she loves me, I dont understand
If time wont change me, perhaps she can
And I feel her trying when were apart
God dont let me break her heart

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

17 posted 2002-07-29 06:12 PM

Such beautiful words, Lauren...

Said if I only could ...
-KB

texasrose
Member

since 2001-10-24

Posts 146

18 posted 2002-07-30 08:49 PM

So beautiful are your words Greeneyes. I am so glad you share your words of grace with us.

[This message has been edited by texasrose (07-30-2002 08:54 PM).]

ShadowRider
Senior Member

since 2001-07-14

Posts 1038
USA

19 posted 2002-07-30 09:50 PM

Lauren, your grace of writing
is a courtesy that i never tired of receiving.

All things, natural and powerful in their godmade hands,
they seem insurmountable, but with our health,
our propensity to love,
we are invincible in spirit!!

all my best to a grand lady,
jeff

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

20 posted 2002-07-30 09:54 PM

Lauren, this is beautiul.
Too many special lines to quote any one.
Sandra

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

21 posted 2002-07-30 09:59 PM

I will stand in silence,
against the black sky;
tears will fall      when the dusting of snow
graces   my face

I still struggle not to sink --
    into small shapes of   water

Lady Lauren~

Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal.

{on the wings of words are spirits fly...and our souls are free~me}

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

22 posted 2002-07-31 11:59 PM

Thank you all so much for reading and responding so kindly.....I know I havent been around much, but I am working on that....muwahhhhhhhhh 's to all...

Lauren~

The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket
I lean against the wind pretend I am weightless and in this moment I am happy

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (08-01-2002 12:01 AM).]

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