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Small Shapes of Water |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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The mornings will grow colder in later August flowers will be in vivid color, before the first snowfall carries them away to their place among earth The rains will be bitter, making leaves tremble, fires of the mountain will glow of all natural things Twilight will bleed green and blue as one, brilliant scenes painted on tin coverings {I will, as before} Chase the dark, trace the black sense of something familiar – between the lines, shoulders, -- curves of your fingers in your dark shadow {Amber of my midnight I breathe you again} This night will end, become jealous -- eyes of angels will kiss the earth I will stand in silence, against the black sky; tears will fall when the dusting of snow graces my face I still struggle not to sink -- into small shapes of water The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket I lean against the wind pretend I am weightless and in this moment I am happy [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (07-28-2002 12:21 AM).] |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Lauren, beautiful images in this...and seems to be a few feelings too... Hugs...hope you are doing OK now... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Awwwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, I have missed your gorgeous words so so much, this reminds me of September in Missouri where when I'mn with my grandparents we feel this sudden cool brezzes and the apple trees are budding in amber! (kiss on cheek) This is beautiful, sweet friend, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Lauren, this actually leaves me speechless, you convey emotion, and truths like seldom do, I have nothing clever to say after reading this except for 'sigh' it's a keeper! Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas |
Very beautifully chilling!! I love this!! I'd pick a favorite line, but they're all so GOOD!! Kris A bird never flies so high that it can't hit the ground |
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sodpossom Senior Member
since 2001-06-15
Posts 723N.C |
Lovely images.Enjoyed it! |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
"... eyes of angels will kiss the earth." Makes me think that the stars are watching me, as they slowly drop to the west and the new day births in the east .... .... makes me feel like a "DAY-dream Believer". |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Wow I'm amazed at your imagary If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come? |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
With the heat as it is around the country, this was a cooling read, on the sad side, but still, I felt the chill... thank you! |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I just love your beautiful imagery, Lauren...and this poem is a sure statement that you are back in Minnesota, where there are real winters.  ~ chipmunk hugsLyra |
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JAR Junior Member
since 2001-11-06
Posts 34 |
{Amber of my midnight I breathe you again} amazing feelin' I think you know how I feel right? JAR |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GreenEyes~ Such delicately decorated imagery~ Beautimous~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Lauren, this is just magnificent. It conjured up such wonderful images in my mind. Thank you. Hope you are feeling okay and mending. Hugs, Marti "Even if life is full of thorns, I still embrace it for I know that in between those thorns, there is a rose worth all the pain." |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Greeneyes - I don't know what to say, as I've already said it all about your writings. Beautiful, just beautiful. Praying that you are well... BC |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
So very very beautiful Lauren. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
what can I say that hasn't already been said?? well, let's try this: you know the reflections. . . wonderful work. . . ---------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
{I will, as before} Chase the dark, trace the black sense of something familiar between the lines, shoulders, -- curves of your fingers in your dark shadow {Amber of my midnight I breathe you again} This night will end, become jealous -- eyes of angels will kiss the earth I will stand in silence, against the black sky; tears will fall when the dusting of snow graces my face ==================================== time and time again you move me...you take me back to places I need to revisit. time and time again you bring to mind the word exquisite.  jmHow she loves me, I dont understand |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Such beautiful words, Lauren... Said if I only could ... |
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texasrose Member
since 2001-10-24
Posts 146 |
So beautiful are your words Greeneyes. I am so glad you share your words of grace with us. [This message has been edited by texasrose (07-30-2002 08:54 PM).] |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Lauren, your grace of writing is a courtesy that i never tired of receiving. All things, natural and powerful in their godmade hands, they seem insurmountable, but with our health, our propensity to love, we are invincible in spirit!! all my best to a grand lady, jeff |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Lauren, this is beautiul. Too many special lines to quote any one. Sandra |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I will stand in silence, against the black sky; tears will fall when the dusting of snow graces my face I still struggle not to sink -- into small shapes of water Lady Lauren~  Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Thank you all so much for reading and responding so kindly.....I know I havent been around much, but I am working on that....muwahhhhhhhhh 's to all... Lauren~ The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket I lean against the wind pretend I am weightless and in this moment I am happy [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (08-01-2002 12:01 AM).] |
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