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Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2002-07-26 10:17 PM

The crunch of leaves
shattering the silence of a morn
as gentle rays bathe the tops
and crawl toward earth

The fluttering of wings
startled by footfalls,
soaring into the haven
of a lofty sanctuary.

Smoke lazily rising from a cabin
far in the distance, visible only
from an eagle’s view.

Peace covers the morning haze
as life awakes to the climb of
a golden sun.

To sit, side by side
sipping hot fresh coffee
to the smell of shoulders
white.....

A Loon calls to a mate
as love rests in the tranquility
of morning glow.

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2002-07-26 10:25 PM

(smiles) Awwwwww, such peaceful serenity fills these words, sweet friend, I love waking up early in the morning too and watching the birds sing happily, this is gorgeous, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!

May love and light awlays shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Tea Lady
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since 2002-07-11

Posts 26

2 posted 2002-07-26 10:29 PM

Ah, you have captured this (I felt) in the ending. Love should do just that. You led beautifully with this. My compliments!

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

3 posted 2002-07-26 11:44 PM

Dang.........ya sure know how to make a word carry a thought a long way. You made sereness turn to heaven's delight without missing a beat and just spilled it all loose without losing a drop of intent. Excellent writing. I am very much impressed. The flow of images transpired to thought was done superbly in every verse.

ShadowRider
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since 2001-07-14

Posts 1038
USA

4 posted 2002-07-27 12:00 PM

a view with the ears
of the lake denizens
with mournful wail
that deceives all except
for who it is intended

a wonderfully scenic picture, Magnus. *s*
Wondering, of course, if you are fortunate enuff
to be that close to nature's paintbrush to see this....
tSR

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2002-07-27 12:03 PM

YOU RANG?

smiling...couldn't resist, as this is...well? total serenity!

wondrous signs and omens occur, if only we can be quiet enough to notice.

totally lovely.

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

6 posted 2002-07-27 01:12 AM

You have described a heaven moment for an earth-bound spirit here. Well done.

Nan(Pilgrim variety)

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

7 posted 2002-07-27 06:03 AM

Excellent....I have seen the rays crawl
towards earth...oh, this is very, very good...
and very, very you....

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

8 posted 2002-07-27 09:11 AM

Yeah they mate for life and they're wonderful.
Exceptional write Barry! Loved it all!

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

9 posted 2002-07-27 10:26 AM

Barry

You have painted tranquility with this beautiful poem. Just beautiful!

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

10 posted 2002-07-27 11:24 AM

Magnus,
A keeper, you said well.

Goodknight
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since 2002-06-15

Posts 2386
Ohio, USA

11 posted 2002-07-27 01:22 PM

Barry - the sounds of the loon - you have captured many of the feelings evoked by that sound - your poem is wonderful - Paul

Zinsser
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since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

12 posted 2002-07-27 01:26 PM

A Loon calls to a mate
as love rests in the tranquility
of morning glow.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
beautiful
~~ connie ~~

Suetang
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since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

13 posted 2002-07-27 06:11 PM

This was so very beautiful Barry and so very much enjoyed.

Take care.....Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

14 posted 2002-07-27 08:58 PM

Magnus~

'as gentle rays bathe the tops
and crawl toward earth'

Stunning imagery clothed in the serenity of this lovely piece~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

BloomingRose
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since 2000-08-09

Posts 3092
Florida

15 posted 2002-07-27 09:13 PM

What a lovely picture you paint in words so peaceful!

Deb

Moon Dust

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since 1999-06-11

Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK

16 posted 2002-07-28 01:46 AM

nice reminds me of the time i got home very early in the morning

If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come?

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

17 posted 2002-08-01 06:13 AM

I'm there!

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

18 posted 2002-08-01 01:49 PM

mag'

have heard the loon call cross mandan lake in minn. the view and the vibes are all captured here...dug it sir

Jason
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since 2002-07-31

Posts 72
Macon, GA

19 posted 2002-08-01 02:21 PM

Magnus,

I have to admit that when I saw the name of the poem I expected something a little more dark and sinister than the beautiful picture your words painted here. The imagery you've employed here is spectacular in it's scope.
I look forward to reading more of your work.
Since I have only recently returned from a long sojourn away from my poetic friends here I have missed a lot of good writing. I will have to look back in "time" to see what other gems you've produced from that that mind. Thanks for the wonderful read.

Jason

Practiced in the Art of Perception

[This message has been edited by Jason (08-01-2002 02:22 PM).]

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

20 posted 2002-08-01 02:22 PM

a wonderful analogy of promised love

the loons are dedicated to one another, a fine picture of love that is a decision to endure time

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

21 posted 2002-08-04 04:12 AM

Reminding me of how badly I need a vacation right now...James

Jason
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since 2002-07-31

Posts 72
Macon, GA

22 posted 2002-08-06 12:50 PM

I said earlier that the title here made me think of something entirely different, and I have found something that I wrote to, perhaps, explain what I meant....

Doom
by: Jason Daniels

Though it comes to soon
I await my doom
in darkened room's
eternal gloom
the call of the loon
for me.... a welcome boon.

(in some "archaic" literature the "call of the loon" was considered an ill-omen.
I'm glad to see another meaning applied to it)

thanks again,
Jason

Practiced in the Art of Perception

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

23 posted 2002-08-06 05:43 PM

Jason,  thanx for sharing that poem with
me.  Yes,  I do understand what you mean.

But a loon's call...to me is such a
pleasant yet longing sound,  usually
heard during the stillness of day or night.

A romantic feeling is what I get from that
call,  of a mate to a mate....in wait of
their return....

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