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Call of the Loon
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Call of the Loon |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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The crunch of leaves shattering the silence of a morn as gentle rays bathe the tops and crawl toward earth The fluttering of wings startled by footfalls, soaring into the haven of a lofty sanctuary. Smoke lazily rising from a cabin far in the distance, visible only from an eagle’s view. Peace covers the morning haze as life awakes to the climb of a golden sun. To sit, side by side sipping hot fresh coffee to the smell of shoulders white..... A Loon calls to a mate as love rests in the tranquility of morning glow. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Awwwwww, such peaceful serenity fills these words, sweet friend, I love waking up early in the morning too and watching the birds sing happily, this is gorgeous, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!  May love and light awlays shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Tea Lady Junior Member
since 2002-07-11
Posts 26 |
Ah, you have captured this (I felt) in the ending. Love should do just that. You led beautifully with this. My compliments! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Dang.........ya sure know how to make a word carry a thought a long way. You made sereness turn to heaven's delight without missing a beat and just spilled it all loose without losing a drop of intent. Excellent writing. I am very much impressed. The flow of images transpired to thought was done superbly in every verse. |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
a view with the ears of the lake denizens with mournful wail that deceives all except for who it is intended a wonderfully scenic picture, Magnus. *s* Wondering, of course, if you are fortunate enuff to be that close to nature's paintbrush to see this.... tSR |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
YOU RANG? smiling...couldn't resist, as this is...well? total serenity! wondrous signs and omens occur, if only we can be quiet enough to notice. totally lovely. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
You have described a heaven moment for an earth-bound spirit here. Well done. Nan(Pilgrim variety) |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Excellent....I have seen the rays crawl towards earth...oh, this is very, very good... and very, very you.... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Yeah they mate for life and they're wonderful. Exceptional write Barry! Loved it all! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry You have painted tranquility with this beautiful poem. Just beautiful! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Magnus, A keeper, you said well. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Barry - the sounds of the loon - you have captured many of the feelings evoked by that sound - your poem is wonderful - Paul |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
A Loon calls to a mate as love rests in the tranquility of morning glow. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ beautiful ~~ connie ~~ |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
This was so very beautiful Barry and so very much enjoyed. Take care.....Sue I am in motion |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Magnus~ 'as gentle rays bathe the tops and crawl toward earth' Stunning imagery clothed in the serenity of this lovely piece~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
What a lovely picture you paint in words so peaceful! Deb |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
nice reminds me of the time i got home very early in the morning If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come? |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 I'm there! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
mag' have heard the loon call cross mandan lake in minn. the view and the vibes are all captured here...dug it sir |
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Jason Member
since 2002-07-31
Posts 72Macon, GA |
Magnus, I have to admit that when I saw the name of the poem I expected something a little more dark and sinister than the beautiful picture your words painted here. The imagery you've employed here is spectacular in it's scope. I look forward to reading more of your work. Since I have only recently returned from a long sojourn away from my poetic friends here I have missed a lot of good writing. I will have to look back in "time" to see what other gems you've produced from that that mind. Thanks for the wonderful read. Jason Practiced in the Art of Perception [This message has been edited by Jason (08-01-2002 02:22 PM).] |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
a wonderful analogy of promised love the loons are dedicated to one another, a fine picture of love that is a decision to endure time Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Reminding me of how badly I need a vacation right now...James |
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Jason Member
since 2002-07-31
Posts 72Macon, GA |
I said earlier that the title here made me think of something entirely different, and I have found something that I wrote to, perhaps, explain what I meant.... Doom by: Jason Daniels Though it comes to soon I await my doom in darkened room's eternal gloom the call of the loon for me.... a welcome boon. (in some "archaic" literature the "call of the loon" was considered an ill-omen. I'm glad to see another meaning applied to it) thanks again, Jason Practiced in the Art of Perception |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Jason, thanx for sharing that poem with me. Yes, I do understand what you mean. But a loon's call...to me is such a pleasant yet longing sound, usually heard during the stillness of day or night. A romantic feeling is what I get from that call, of a mate to a mate....in wait of their return.... |
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