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when widowed I think |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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zoe is me, no zoe, is free, she skips words with my leaden pen, she fancifully soars unmindful of my tethers zoe is smiles and joy and poetry gloominess sought to bind with sodden thoughts, denial, to gravestone with forgetfulness but zoe demanded emancipation- three years it took to word her ransom, now zoe is free no zoe is me when widowed I think a writer we will be |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
a writer you ARE jb...i just love your work...all of it!!! helen |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I agree with 1slick_lady!!! *S* Freedom may have to wait... but a writer you already are. *S* I think you've given new definition to the term "the tie that binds"... That definitely puts the poem in a somber category... but the gossamer lightness of zoe in her freedom is a wonderful juxaposition and a glimpse of what could be. And I love the sprinkle of rhyme... this is excellent! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
thank you ladies  at least I am writing again...even if its not good, its better than when no words are forthcoming |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
----------- but zoe demanded emancipation- three years it took to word her ransom, now zoe is free ... ----------- now this is writing ... who would not agree? excellent |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
jellybeans - your writings are suberb, as this one is... BC |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Definitely, I agree...Rex... that is excellent writing!  ~ poetic chipmunk hugsLyra |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You have Zoe... that is good... I know one of our ladies here has her Jo... another few of them know where their lights are hidden as well... just keep writing, JB... don't ever allow the well to dry... |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Sun is right, JB... and you have spawned a thought... you will see it soon... keep writing... write with grace, all others lose face; |
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Blue Kitty Member
since 2002-08-05
Posts 72Virginia |
Oh, now I understand the poem by Lady in White, I guess I should look around a little more before responding so quickly. Then I might understand more. Nice write with heavy thinking. P. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Oh, yes, surely you are a writer already! This was an interesting piece, for sure. E-mail me if you're interested in this fun, free online class that will start again sometime in August. The course leader is also going to start and advanced class for $5 per 8 week session. I'm only mentioning this because of your comment, re. critiques, above. I've not read enough of your poetry to evaluate it, nor am I equipped to do so. But I'd like to see more people in the class so there are more perspectives re. what we post. In fact the class is called "Perspectives." Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
jellybeans I have another piece of me who waits outside my window whispering to me, be free. I so enjoyed reading this poignant poem. I agree with those above..you are a writer! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
jellybeans~YOU are a writer, and this m'dear is exquisite! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
This really got to me. You wrote it..I read it..so therefore..you are a writer. A damn good one..for lack of more effective words at this moment. Hugs poetess. Sincerely, Reg |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
rex, I don't know how far you had to go back to find this, but thank you much for bringing it back..I had really thought it had bombed earlier when posted...I know it means something to me, but I thought it was too personal to go over well... thank you all for your kind comments...zoe and I both appreciated and love the people here at PIP |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Things really don't bomb here at Passions, they do sometimes seem to slip by unnoticed at times. I've always enjoyed your works ... we both started here about the same time so I generally read your posts when I do see them. I have a problem with reading and not replying but I'm trying to change that |
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