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Balladeer
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0 posted 2002-07-25 08:31 PM



Hello, mr. white man.
What'll it be today?
Three cartons of Camels?
Coming right up...

What's that?

Oh, yes, we're always busy here on the reservation.
No tax makes our cigarettes much cheaper
as you well know.
Yes, we're lucky...
Lost our lands
lost our heritage
lost our culture
but we get to sell cigarettes tax-free
so I guess that's something...

What did I say? Oh, I'm just ramblin'
Old ramblin' injun, that's me.
Here, let me bag those up for you..

You need to quit?
Lotta people feel that way.
Well, you know they're deadly.
They say cigarettes kill more people
than all other illnesses combined
but what's not dangerous in this life, right?
Man's gotta have some simple pleasures,
don't you agree?

OK, then. Nice talking to you.
Come on back when you run out.
We're always open...

Bring your friends.


© Copyright 2002 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2002-07-25 08:38 PM



Our lucky night...free verse
from Balladeer as well...and isn't this
right?  They are running the casinos as
well...and I wish them the best...they
will end up getting all of it back, and
the white man's greed WILL be our downfall...

Thanks for this...

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2002-07-25 08:40 PM


Balladeer,
About as subtle as an anvil dropping on your toe. Enjoyed

Enchantress
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3 posted 2002-07-25 08:40 PM


Excellent write 'Deer!
And how very very true!!
The title fits just perfectly too!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

doreen peri
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4 posted 2002-07-25 08:45 PM


they got whitey back, yknow?

they have opened casinos on reservations and they are raking it in

it's about time

they got taken, big time

now they're taking back! i applaud them!

great write, michael!

yer smokin'!

Krissy
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kent England
5 posted 2002-07-25 09:29 PM


’Deer hi there WOW FV from you, all I can say is this is magnificent. You know I really love your work, and in Rhyme you are king, but this is outstanding writing. This has an incredible flow to it the message very very powerful I love it. So very very well done, you should write more of FV you do it extremely well. This is exceptional, and notice I get to answer before mum does.

Mum you are just too slow to catch a cold, do you notice ‘Deer does FV, it proves its real writing

Love and warm stuff
As always
Krissy

And while thy willing soul transpiers
at every pore with instant fires
Andrew Marvell 1621-1678

Bill Charles
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6 posted 2002-07-25 09:37 PM


Balladeer - love these writings of yours. Ach, A'chhhhh, must be dem smokes>>>>>

BC

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7 posted 2002-07-25 10:08 PM


I think Sy's reply fits quite well.....

Mr subtle.....

ThunderMage
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8 posted 2002-07-25 10:29 PM


Too true. The White men jerked around the Indians, now it's our turn to lose.

What is life without poetry and adventure?
"Little sister" is just another way of saying "Guardian Angel"!

the_loner_23
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9 posted 2002-07-25 10:30 PM


Very well said

Cold hands means a warm heart

Mistletoe Angel
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10 posted 2002-07-25 10:30 PM




(big hugggssssss) Oh Balladeer, I find this true with all my heart, much of my ancestry is from Cherokee Native Indians and I too find it sad how white mans imperialist ways through history has hurt so many and I wish we can all be thankful for what we have and celebrate our differences and traditions! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Balladeer, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

SmartChick
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11 posted 2002-07-25 10:36 PM


Well Balladeer, where have you been? I haven't seen you in a while. I enjoyed this as much as I do everything else you write.
suthern
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12 posted 2002-07-26 12:07 PM


I can't improve on Seymour's reply. *S* But if I thought a few profits would erase all injustices, I'd start smoking. *S*
paladin
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13 posted 2002-07-26 12:13 PM


Do I detect a smirk on the cigar store's indians face?

paladin

Madame Chipmunk
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14 posted 2002-07-26 12:16 PM


Perfect...absolutely perfect, Michael...
and they are getting their sweet revenge on us, aren't they...
but don't forget the tobacco companies....
do you think that people who have gotten ill because of tobacco will ever get revenge on them.
Maybe they should all be forced into a hotel banquet room together...and forced to smoke one cigarette after another for 30 days straight....and of course the windows would have to be shut tight and all the ventilation turned off...
Thanks for sharing your free verse with us.
~ chipmunk hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

Marsha
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15 posted 2002-07-26 09:35 PM


’Deer dearest heart, this is simply perfect, you know that of course, and FV from you is such a special treat. The format suits this perfectly, and thr message is utterly utterly right on the money. Do I love this YOU have to know I do?

Actually I don’t have an issue with smoking per se, I believe it is the right of the individual to chose. However I do realise that it is in the tobacco companies interests not to perfect a product that isn’t addictive, and that by the time most people are aware of the dangers of smoking it is too late they are hooked. And just like any other drug the withdrawal of it causes agonies. Luckily for me I don’t smoke but I can raise a fire Mmmm!

Excellent writing and I love it utterly. I would have replied to this earlier but I’ve not been able to get on the site until just now.


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy



Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the earthquake wind and fire

[This message has been edited by Marsha (07-26-2002 09:36 PM).]

Mark Bohannan
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16 posted 2002-07-27 12:09 PM


Got alot of cowboys pickin cacti plugs outta there saddle side on this one.  Ya gotta know I am sitting here smilin' and noddin my head just thinking ....
Pilgrimage
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17 posted 2002-07-27 01:04 AM


Hey, white man-

Nan(Pilgrim variety)

Elizabeth Santos
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18 posted 2002-07-27 02:40 AM


Well, well. well!!! What do we have here? The master has succumbed to free verse. And it is wonderful, even if it doesn't rhyme.
Good one
Liz

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19 posted 2002-09-24 08:43 PM


your'e always good for a smile
thanks J.

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