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The Indians' Ultimate Revenge...
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The Indians' Ultimate Revenge... |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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Hello, mr. white man. What'll it be today? Three cartons of Camels? Coming right up... What's that? Oh, yes, we're always busy here on the reservation. No tax makes our cigarettes much cheaper as you well know. Yes, we're lucky... Lost our lands lost our heritage lost our culture but we get to sell cigarettes tax-free so I guess that's something... What did I say? Oh, I'm just ramblin' Old ramblin' injun, that's me. Here, let me bag those up for you.. You need to quit? Lotta people feel that way. Well, you know they're deadly. They say cigarettes kill more people than all other illnesses combined but what's not dangerous in this life, right? Man's gotta have some simple pleasures, don't you agree? OK, then. Nice talking to you. Come on back when you run out. We're always open... Bring your friends. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Our lucky night...free verse from Balladeer as well...and isn't this right? They are running the casinos as well...and I wish them the best...they will end up getting all of it back, and the white man's greed WILL be our downfall... Thanks for this... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, About as subtle as an anvil dropping on your toe. Enjoyed |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write 'Deer! And how very very true!! The title fits just perfectly too! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
they got whitey back, yknow? they have opened casinos on reservations and they are raking it in it's about time they got taken, big time now they're taking back! i applaud them! great write, michael! yer smokin'!  |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
’Deer hi there WOW FV from you, all I can say is this is magnificent. You know I really love your work, and in Rhyme you are king, but this is outstanding writing. This has an incredible flow to it the message very very powerful I love it. So very very well done, you should write more of FV you do it extremely well. This is exceptional, and notice I get to answer before mum does. Mum you are just too slow to catch a cold, do you notice ‘Deer does FV, it proves its real writing As always Krissy   And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Balladeer - love these writings of yours. Ach, A'chhhhh, must be dem smokes>>>>> BC |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I think Sy's reply fits quite well..... Mr subtle..... |
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ThunderMage Senior Member
since 2002-06-20
Posts 812Canada |
Too true. The White men jerked around the Indians, now it's our turn to lose. What is life without poetry and adventure? |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Very well said Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Balladeer, I find this true with all my heart, much of my ancestry is from Cherokee Native Indians and I too find it sad how white mans imperialist ways through history has hurt so many and I wish we can all be thankful for what we have and celebrate our differences and traditions! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Balladeer, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Well Balladeer, where have you been? I haven't seen you in a while. I enjoyed this as much as I do everything else you write. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I can't improve on Seymour's reply. *S* But if I thought a few profits would erase all injustices, I'd start smoking. *S* |
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paladin
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. |
Do I detect a smirk on the cigar store's indians face? paladin |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Perfect...absolutely perfect, Michael... and they are getting their sweet revenge on us, aren't they... but don't forget the tobacco companies.... do you think that people who have gotten ill because of tobacco will ever get revenge on them. Maybe they should all be forced into a hotel banquet room together...and forced to smoke one cigarette after another for 30 days straight....and of course the windows would have to be shut tight and all the ventilation turned off... Thanks for sharing your free verse with us.  ~ chipmunk hugsLyra |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
’Deer dearest heart, this is simply perfect, you know that of course, and FV from you is such a special treat. The format suits this perfectly, and thr message is utterly utterly right on the money. Do I love this YOU have to know I do? Actually I don’t have an issue with smoking per se, I believe it is the right of the individual to chose. However I do realise that it is in the tobacco companies interests not to perfect a product that isn’t addictive, and that by the time most people are aware of the dangers of smoking it is too late they are hooked. And just like any other drug the withdrawal of it causes agonies. Luckily for me I don’t smoke but I can raise a fire Mmmm! Excellent writing and I love it utterly. I would have replied to this earlier but I’ve not been able to get on the site until just now.  Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  Breathe through the heat of our desire Thy coolness and they balm Let sense be dumb let flesh retire Speak through the earthquake wind and fire [This message has been edited by Marsha (07-26-2002 09:36 PM).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Got alot of cowboys pickin cacti plugs outta there saddle side on this one. Ya gotta know I am sitting here smilin' and noddin my head just thinking ....  |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Hey, white man- Nan(Pilgrim variety) |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Well, well. well!!! What do we have here? The master has succumbed to free verse. And it is wonderful, even if it doesn't rhyme. Good one Liz |
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*Stubby* Member
since 2002-09-19
Posts 122 |
your'e always good for a smile thanks J. |
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