A Clown's Smile---answering a challenge

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Open Poetry #21

A Clown's Smile---answering a challenge

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2002-07-21 10:04 PM

to write to the title.

A Clown’s Smile

Painted on
to be unchanging;
no attempt,
at rearranging,
will more than futile be.

A tear may trickle
from his eye
and though his voice
may weave a sigh,
his sorrow won’t be seen.

Not like flesh
more like plastic;
not quite rigid,
yet, not elastic
it radiates the scene.

If only he
would be more real;
if he would show,
and not conceal,
the truth of all he means.

Oh, must he be
a smiling clown
when deep inside
he wears a frown
Why can’t he just come clean?

His painted smile’s
a rosy glow
and in his eyes
it’s hard to know
what’s there to glean.

©July 21, 2002

I'm satisfied with all the the last line of this, but the last line was the best I could come up with...suggestions?

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2002-07-21 10:15 PM

This was totally cool

Cold hands means a warm heart

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

2 posted 2002-07-21 11:06 PM

Virginia,
i have felt like the clown, due to certain circumstances that require me to be diplomatic...i have no suggestions for the last line though...perhaps i would think more about this one and get back to you??

to take off the mask and expose your frown...i wonder why sometimes such a simple thing can't be done..hmmm...

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