Footprints Of Hope How I came to PiP’s challenge a try at rhyme

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Krissy
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since 2002-02-22

Posts 556
kent England

0 posted 2002-07-17 09:33 PM

Footprints Of Hope
How I came to PiP’s challenge

I came to walk in
Footprints of hope
To see souls in pain
And ways to cope
To collect your tears
Your sighing why
Your laughter your fears
To taste your sigh

I came to see the smiles and pain
The holding back
The flood of rain
To bathe in joy
To feel all this
To really know
Of Poets kiss

I came because I wanted too
To speak with all
I felt I knew
To laugh with ‘Deer
To hold Margie’s hand
To breathe the touch of
Kethry’s land

I came to walk beside Kari
To sigh with Sy
Where souls walk free
To listen to tales
Of Magnus Knights
To Larry’s cheer
And Toerag’s fights

I came here because I know it’s true
This is a place
Of rainbow hue
Not just sighs of lover’s plight
Not only soul’s
Trapped in night
Here there’s more
Reach out and see
The real of life
PiP’s community

Krissy

My second attempt at rhyme, I shan’t tell you what mum said but the words don’t ask featured in it so let me know if it’s any good please

And while thy willing soul transpiers
at every pore with instant fires
Andrew Marvell 1621-1678

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2002-07-17 09:36 PM

It's one of my

s
if that tells you anything....

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2002-07-17 09:40 PM

YAY!!! Oh my gosh, I love this, sweet friend, I love it just the way it is and I just know Marsha and Emma and everyone else reading this will love it too! (big hugggssssss) You are a very special part of all of Passions to us, sweet friend, this is beautiful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Krissy, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

3 posted 2002-07-17 10:30 PM

Beautiful

Cold hands means a warm heart

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

4 posted 2002-07-17 10:48 PM

I'm glad you got here, Krissy...
You have been a marvelous additon to our family.

~ hugs from another auntie

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Larry C

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since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

5 posted 2002-07-17 11:20 PM

Krissy,
Sweet girl...how absolutely wonderful. You warmed my heart all under. I love this and it is such a perfect example of why I'm glad you are here. You have such a giving, caring heart and on top of all that...talent! Bless you for blessing us all. Thanks,
Larry C

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

pjtalty
Member

since 2002-07-17

Posts 111
W.A., Australia

6 posted 2002-07-17 11:49 PM

Well, Krissy, this is my first post on this site and it is my pleasure to do so in the form of a comment on your "Footprints Of Hope" poem.

I think you conveyed your message most effectively: the rhyme was fine, the tone most appropriate (sincerity) and the theme as expressed in the title was carried forward in the style of the text .
It was not only an expression of hope for positive outcomes from participation here, but also a tribute and encouragement to the poets you named. Brava!!

I look forward to reading more of your work.

Patrick Talty

[This message has been edited by pjtalty (07-17-2002 11:52 PM).]

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

7 posted 2002-07-19 12:52 PM

you did a wonderful job on the rhyme and meaning... Mom should be proud
hugsssss
M

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

8 posted 2002-07-19 10:37 AM

Krissy,
for a second time rhyme
you did just fine
and the sentiments too
are so like you
Don't let your mum
bring you undone
in footprints shown
how much you've grown.
Keth

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

9 posted 2002-07-19 06:38 PM

KrissyDear~

Your rhyme is justifiable WONDERFUL !
You just remind me so of the wonderful song sung by Frank Sinatra - "I Did It My Way"~

By golly ... you're supercalifragilistic !
I'll bet ya' a pressie that Mum thinks so too~
In fact ... I can GuaranDarnteeIt !!
Love n' hugs~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Balladeer

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Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

10 posted 2002-07-19 09:29 PM

Bravo, Krissy!!

Not only was the rhyme excellent but the way you incorporated all of the poets and the emotions into it is truly remarkable. Hopefully your mum will take your name off of E-Bay now since you have shown so much promise....and I was planning to bid for you, too!

Wonderful work, Krissy!!

shadowchild458
Member

since 2002-07-10

Posts 117
MN,USA

11 posted 2002-07-19 10:28 PM

though i really don't post in this forum so i really shouldn't reply i plan on posting here in the future so...here i go!

it was a wonderful poem and it truly shows how much you treasure this site...don't we all!! yes we do!

it was a very well rhyming poem and i loved it. it shows how much these people mean to you and how much this site really does bring people together into 'a family of friends' i just love this place!!!

life may just take a while but i guess heaven's worth the wait

AKJ

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