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Challenges ( My very First attempt at a Paradelle )
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Challenges ( My very First attempt at a Paradelle ) |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States 
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Challenges The mountains we must climb The mountains we must climb Not sure of what we will find Not sure of what we will find We must find the mountains Not sure of what we will climb Always focused on the challenges in our mind Always focused on the challenges in our mind As we travel through time As we travel through time Through time in our mind as we travel Always focused on the challenges The goals we set soon will be met The goals we set soon will be met The challenges of life not over yet The challenges of life not over yet The goals of life we set Soon the challenges not over yet, will be met The challenges in our life we must find Always focused as we travel through time Soon on the mountains we will climb The goals will be met Not sure of what we set Challenges of the mind not over yet Paul Wilson 7-17-02 Thanks Sunshine |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Paul, I have a love/hate relationship with Paradelles so I'm not really a person to judge, however it reads like a Paradelle and feels like a Paradelle - so it must be one. I liked your flow and theme. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  BRAVO!!! Oh my gosh, this is wonderful, sweet friend, paradelles are so very difficult to write and this is splendid, you should be so proud of yourself! (big hugggssssss) This is superb, sweet friend, you have indeed surmounted a challenge here, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Paul, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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mycafe Senior Member
since 2002-05-23
Posts 584 |
Hey Paul this sounds really great for your first attempt! I tried my hand at Paradelle and what I've written looked like a pile of nonsense,  mycafe Keep counting your blessings |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You're welcome Paul. Very, very welcome. You've given me hope of writing my own, you made it look very simple, and I know they are NOT.... thank you. |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
The goals will be met Not sure of what we set Challenges of the mind not over yet Congratulations! You met the Challenge splendidly as well as addressing a worthy subject. I enjoyed it. And btw Welcome to PIP. Melton |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Kethry.. Thank you for your kind words Noah.. As always your are so encouraging Thank you for the vote of confidence Mycafe.. Thank You. Don't give up, I look forward to reading yours when it's done. Next time I do one I thing that I will write the last stanza first, then create the rest of the stanza's from that. Melton.. Thank You so much. Sunshine.. Without your suggestion this never would have came about, so for all your kind words & faith Thank You very much. |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Well, it looks to me like you did very good on this. |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Awesome Cold hands means a warm heart |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Paul, you have a paradelle here and one fine life's lesson! funny though..my first attempt at writing a paradelle deals with a similar theme..something like how i wriggled out of my comfort zone, embraced something new and was the better for it.... |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Smart Chick....Many Thanks for your kind words loner 23... So few words with so much meaning & appreciation. Thank You Kind Lady. faterider... Thank You so much. I would really like to read yours, please let me know if you post it. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
A little 'Smart Search' uncovered this lovely paradelle - It looks pretty darned good to me - and - I give you credit for digging into our workshop on a couple of the most difficult formats going.. I'm still working on a sestina, myself... Welcome to our workshop world.. Watch out for the girls out at recess, though - They tend to usurp the merry-go-round...  |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Nan... Thank you for taking the time to read. I appreciate your comments. I will keep an eye on those girls on the merry-go-round. |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
...'The challenges in our life we must find Always focused as we travel through time Soon on the mountains we will climb...' What a beautiful life lesson in this line. Bravo! I don't know a paradelle from a pretzel, but I applaud your efforts. Hugs, Marti |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Marti... Thank you so very much. Sometimes a Paradelle will get your mind all twisted up like a pretzel, especially when it's your first, then at the end it all comes together. Thanks Again. |
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