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Torn - Part II
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Torn - Part II |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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Torn - Part II ©2002 C.G. Ward wanted to write happiness to poetry, founder a grin as if it could bolster the gut-wrench of divisibility across the space of nether distances. thought I could blister the pages of this brightly summered day with chamfered edges of joy. again - change and chance litter the doorways, each fanned toward the next, spanned ad infinitum into the depths of a directionless swirling of white; why does black seem this empty, when the symbol of conventional purity is the color of a cold day in hell? "The Price of Murder," is a book I've never read - looks bad - yet the title's stuck inside my head like the memory of a grade B movie that had no artistic merit save the stomach-clenching groans as the lips synched three seconds after yet another bad pun. and yet, it fits my recollections warmly, while a moment or two ago your face in my head made me grimace. I try to smile still, but at times it's hard. so hard. the fan's blowing cool air across the room and I'm staring at this screen, wondering if words mean anything these days. at the least, they've been muted. at the least, they've sheltered me long enough, and I think it's time to work on a different story, one with a better ending than the clichéd crackle of a 38 Special as they nail the janitor instead of the villain. It's strange how the muse can ride you one direction, when you're feeling the complete opposite. Go figure, thanks for reading. Chris |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Awesome Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
chris now you now the demons that dress as muses well penned guy... I recognize the bricks on those walls of glass |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Christopher...this is like a sip at the well... and I want to stay, and drink some more, but the road beckons... I'll be back... |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Just to let you know I've acknowledged you...  ...but I seemed to have missed the first part of this...will dig for it and be back to this one!!!and? cute pic btw...but don't you EVER gain any weight Creestopher??? YEESH.... how many women would KILL fer those hips??? smiles for you cutie...miss ya round... take care~ Tanya Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
As I read this? I could hear the ticking of the light pull on the ceiling fan...no REALLY. That describes the feel of this for me...time and timelessness...all at once, and a forboden door, invisable...hmm... I could SEE you...laying on spare white sheet, hands crossed beneath your head, staring at the ceiling. Okay...OKAY...I get carried away...leave me to my delusions...you were even wearing the damned "tank!"  loved this. love you. Hope yer well and happy, dawlin'! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I love this...very deep...I know I am reading more into it than is there, but then, isn't that what you wanted? to make us think? And I love the new picture..very rugged..(and I won't say anymore for fear of making you blush! ) |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
I didn't actually read the poem, I just thought you're picture was hot. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"why does black seem this empty, when the symbol of conventional purity is the color of a cold day in hell?" "wondering if words mean anything these days. at the least, they've been muted. at the least, they've sheltered me long enough, and I think it's time to work on a different story, one with a better ending" This piece held a powerful impact Chris ... excellent phrasing and wonderfully clear visuals brought to mind throughout. I loved the flow and the mood you captured within, much enjoyed!  Best wishes, /Kit PS ... back again, forgot to say, I love the new pic too! [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (07-18-2002 07:22 AM).] |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Laughing@Elizabeth Our endings aren't ours...but beginnings are. Even if I do have lots of those wadded up and thrown into the wastebasket of me~wink* Enjoyed this write Mr. Poet. Missed your words. Sincerely, Reg |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
HI-- I really love the way you write, but wanted to email you a little more then I will put here..... you have that talent poet sir...hugsss Lauren~ The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
You - going to write happiness? Never heh... I'm not in a critiquing mood right now hon, so I won't. For now I'll just say - yeah, I understand... huggles..  Kps - I do like that last verse though...a lot... |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Sorry it's taken me so long to get back here - thank you everyone for your replies... i hadn't written for a little while and it was nice to do so again. C |
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