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Slow Man's Land (serenity's challenge)
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Slow Man's Land (serenity's challenge) |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
With a shake of hands In graduation caps They promised to remain true friends But off they went In directions different Found their world at different ends Joe could never Sit still for long His talent made everyone impressed John took his time Found peace in himself And the words of his soul expressed A family for Joe A divorce or two Always moving on to some other place John kept looking For that special one To bring love to his heart, a smile to his face Joe’s addictions became His downfall one day Alone and broke, let it slip from his hand John found love Wrote his poetry in peace Living in harmony in a slow man's land |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Poet Sir, Liked your "take" on this challenge. In your story, I would be...Joe. Interesting, don't you think, the way a phase or a kernel can spark different things? ~wranx |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
each man is a piece of a puzzle, wouldn't you say so?..interesting take here  |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Interesting - the two perspectives. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
you juxtapose these different approaches to living very well in this poem - I enjoyed reading it very much - Paul |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
and did they think of each other...? I believe they probably found the time, each in his own slow man's way |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
this was wonderful, I love how you tell a story and met the challenge so well ~smiling M |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I love yr tales, Sharon. She said burn ... together. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Aw, my heart goes out to him that he couldn't reach out to his love yet I am relieved that he found a pastoral place of peace within his words to express his thoughts until love finds a way! (sigh) This is well-said, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sharon, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I like it. Very unique Cold hands means a warm heart |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
I'm enjoyin the different take on sens's challenge...need to get my butt IN GEAR over here!! hellooooo?? Enjoyed your story line Sharon!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Thank you Sharon, devina and squirrel dude, for helping me avoid, yet another, well egged face. I'm starting to appreciate the whole "politically correct" gender neutral thing. (I'll be over in my corner, sorting things out) Don't hurt me. ~wranx I have great faith in Humanity...It's just most of the Humans, I'm not too keen on. E.F.Rose [This message has been edited by wranx (07-18-2002 12:27 AM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*laughing at wranx* er..okay, WITH wranx? This is a wonderful take on the phrase. As always, you enchant your audience. (show 'em marilyn  ) |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all for your kind words...I appreciate them.  |
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