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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
Desert Dancer By: Noah Eaton 7/16/02 Awake and dreaming Trodding trodden saffron trails Bawling my eyes out for some kaleidoscope lenses So I can stare right through this Davy Lamp sun through the sandstorm veil Oh, I have walked further than you can ever imagine But I've only gotten closer away Abandoning my ship and running for the boondocks Stumbling over mountains of salt, a senseless renegade Swaying my arms Belly-dancing to each footstep Dancing with the Desert Dancer Awake and dreaming With Arabic eyes Resembling the Desert Dancer I'm alone seeking the answer to all my loves desires Hidden from me as Daphne hiding from Apollo Following gypsy flames to the faceless danseuse Learning to drink the sun to relax this soul Developing my shape-shifting To make cumulonimbus of cirrus Summoning the rain to imbue this garden of genips To spend my time working to glow as bright as Sirius Swaying my arms Belly-dancing to each footstep Dancing with the Desert Dancer Awake and dreaming With Arabic eyes Resembling the Desert Dancer Burying yesterdays into the shallow ground Building a bridge to Daphni which the naked eye cannot perceive My heart beating with the thunder of a thousand passing wild horses Shouting for the oncoming possession of ecstasy "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (07-16-2002 09:09 PM).] |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
wow Noah - so many images - so many thoughts - so many feelings - I am awash with the power of your poem - I really enjoyed this - Paul |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I love the imagery in your poems. Enjoyed! Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ah sweet Noah...now you just know how beautiful I think this is don't you?? Of course you do my sidekick!! Good job on this one! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I'm alone seeking the answer to all my loves desires Hidden from me as Daphne hiding from Apollo Following gypsy flames to the faceless danseuse Learning to drink the sun to relax this soul Developing my shape-shifting To make cumulonimbus of cirrus Summoning the rain to imbue this garden of genips To spend my time working to glow as bright as Sirius ======================================== Noah your imagery is as impressive as your vocabulary and imagination. This paints so many scenes and colors in the readers mind. Oh, I have walked further than you can ever imagine But I've only gotten closer away and those lines just hit home for me tonite... wonderful creative writing Poet sir  jm How she loves me, I dont understand |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
Ther is a depth here that is totally enjoyable. You did a fine job. |
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Music Maker Member
since 2002-07-07
Posts 152THE ORIGINAL !!!! |
Noah, I loved this one, I am sure you must have revised and revised on your original idea until you got this one so very right. Your words painted a picture as I read, especially the 'so descriptive' last two lines:- "My heart beating with the thunder of a thousand passing wild horses, Shouting for the oncoming possession of ecstasy"!!! Go to the top of the class!! Kind thoughts, John Post Script!! In one of my postings yesterday about the drunken womaniser, I was not writing about myself !!! LOL, but thank you for your sympathy, sweet Noah!! Someone who thinks logically provides a nice contrast to the real world. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Noah, ================ Oh, I have walked further than you can ever imagine But I've only gotten closer away ================ Wonderful lines! And as for the bridge...I think I saw it. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
oh Noah what a images you paint here, very well done love it ((hugs)) Charisma |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Fantastic images, Noah. Well done, as always. Sandra |
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