Open Poetry #21 |
At The Crack Of Dawn |
Neeraja Senior Member
since 2002-06-22
Posts 812The Netherlands |
I keep my eyes closed enjoying the magic moment of nothingness between sleeping and awakening before I hear the birds at the crack of dawn welcoming the new day with their best songs Unfortunately… it won’t take long to feel the void in my heart because… it’s again an other day without you… |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
That is how I feel when I am out of town and can't speak to Liam. Very good poem. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
a brief moment of hope before the memories flood back and you know today will be just like yesterday arthur |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
How heartbreaking. The contrast between the emotions in the first stanza and the second makes it more powerful. Well done. Nan(Pilgrim variety) |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
A very, very.... hard piece to read. Very real, and sad. The jump from hope to reality is very powerful, as was said. Thank you for the read. I hope.... the hope is soon reality for you. ~Titus As I'm out there, walking, searching, for myself, for you.... won't you join me? Let's walk this journey together. |
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Daniel van Vliet Member
since 2001-08-31
Posts 80 |
"enjoying the magic moment of nothingness" ..... [smile] .... endlessly true. |
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mycafe Senior Member
since 2002-05-23
Posts 584 |
...the feeling of emptiness at the end of it. You've expressed it so well Neeraja. mycafe Keep counting your blessings |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggsssssss) Oh neeraja, this sounds so very sad, sweet friend, my heart goe sout to you and I hope now your love sings like the songbird to your heart and has erased that void in you! (kiss on cheek) My thoughts are with you, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Neeraja, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Possibly the greatest moment of the day is the one after sleep and before full consciousness.....before reality sets in |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'I keep my eyes closed enjoying the magic moment of nothingness between sleeping and awakening' Those are some really clever lines...I, too, love to savor that part of the day...very good write... sp I want to wake up to the sound of waves |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
such a ppowerful image of the voids in one's heart - thanks for the emotion of a well written poem - Paul |
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Neeraja Senior Member
since 2002-06-22
Posts 812The Netherlands |
I feel so happy with all your sweet response to my poem!!! Neeraja (I have to find out how to use those emoticons... smile...) |
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